Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, May 31, 2006.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    sometimes mind goes into somekinda mental block.
    creativity gets stucked. nothing to imagine..
    it happens with me often.. happened recentaly too..
    my last thread was an example of it..
    few dissappointments..
    n then i was on Quest. Quest to write something good..


    words are the warriors,
    in the persuit of the power..
    near the kingdom of my heart,
    there lies the magic tower..
    its a myth since ages,that this pole holds some spell..
    and one who conquers it,will be bestowed upon with,
    immortality from heaven to hell..
    its dynasty of the dreams..
    supremacy of the soul..
    which will enable, all the warriors..
    to command every intellect,
    every idea,
    and every imagination as whole..
    empire of my heart, lacks armor of emotion..
    fictions are dying, visions without notion..
    only a magic tower can salvage them,
    as every idea, reason, reverie are on death bed..
    thoughts are spiritless, almost dead..
    so its a quest for immortality
    its a quest for existance..
    quest to dominate, quest for persistance..
    where words are knights, who willl fight,
    with their golden heart as sword..
    of this reign of power, enchanted magic tower..
    no doubt, soon they'll be the lord..

    explaination or the concept: sometimes people just cant put their thoughts into words. not because they dont have any,just coz they dont know how to use them. ideas just die before they cud shape. proper words lack proper emotion. this shudnt happen always. deep within our mind there is an ultimate power (magic tower= capacity n confidence. dynasty of dreams=capacity, supremacy of the soul=confidence)
    we shud just believe in this power n then we'll find..our words (warriors) will never fail to express ourself. our thoughts,emotions, ideas will be forever immortal with words.

    now criticism is welcome..:cool:
    Sharmontime and BubblyMartini like this.
  2. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Mixed reactions to this one. Lots of imagery infused into the poem and the theme was a good abstract one. The use of language went awry a few places but for the most part this was a wonderful effort. I cant believe that the same person who wrote this wrote some other poems that i loathed. All in all, good job Stick to stuff like this and keep up your reputation. Dont write for the sake of writing, write whenever you feel like expressing yourself, like you did with this poem. Cheers.
  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    *on cloud no. seven*
    *Quest is not that bad*
  4. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    ^And also, can you please start acting a bit more maturely? Stop being a little girl?
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    ok getting serious..

    btw sarat, i dont wanna keep myself limited to such imaginery stuff, so i try every possible way to write. its my bad luck i dont do much impressive in other things. but as i said, its my Quest, one day or other i'll have my magic tower for sure..
  6. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    ^That's my girl. Keep up that confidence and critics like me wont be able to shake you a bit. Learn from whatever opinions you get and soon you'll be a brilliant poet. Keep up the attitude. Your magic tower is yours to conquer.
  7. guns_n_gore

    guns_n_gore hell raiser

    fictions are dying, visions without notion..
    only a magic tower can salvage them
    does not fit here
    immortality from heaven to hell..
    its dynasty of the dreams..
    supremacy of the soul..
    three cheers for this one
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    And you said your english isnt good!:)

    was a bit confused in between
    but anwys
    you can do better than this girl
    good effort..

    PS- do a spellcheck
  9. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    thoughts live in mind on paper they r mere dead words, pleading others to give them some room in their mind.......and ambiguity of expression makes thoughts multi facet cuse u cant express precisely then u cut the previously written line and shape it more ..then another cut anothr addition and some fill-up's ...So i dont support ur idea...
    but good poem
  10. Zafar

    Zafar New Member

    Great concept! It's a little bit rough around the edges, but that'll change with time and practice.
    Try not to confine yourself to rhyme.

    A good technique to build your skills in written expression is writing in streams of consciousness. Buy yourself a little notebook and write down what's on your mind every so often :D
  11. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    Good one. Liked it.
    Nice theme.
  12. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    hey.. thanks sharmontime.

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