Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by monica_decosta, Oct 22, 2012.

  1. a point
    creates a line
    a line dragged a plane
    a plain sweeps and forms a cube
    we all moving to form another dimension..

    u asked my point
    my point my love is..

    u became a point in my pointless abyss
    and i dragged it
    rest all is just a consequence
  2. this all is just a consequence..
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    ahh...beauty in simplicity! love it!
  4. Thanks ..

    Rest all is just a dimension..
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I don't understand...
    are your comments a correction to the last line or do they mean something else altogether?
  6. horseeeeee .. my friend if the poem says that consequences are consequential then a series of poems must come ..right na ..so i am trying to justify my writing .. shouldn't i ?

    you are free to write the next one in the series ..
  7. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    Simple and beautiful... loved the lines
  8. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    why justify something that's right?

    So next one should be:
    Rest that three line sequence.
  9. ^^ thanks rikkky

    ^ so be it

    these days are lonely :(.... so i will write more... literature in shadow days is amusing, alluring !!!
  10. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    This is so beautiful. You convey so much with so little; almost make it look easy.
  11. ^ its not easyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy ... the most difficult times make u say ur heart easily ...cause u just thought soo much to put you point ..i hate it
  12. Poison...

    Poison... New Member

    It is beautiful nevertheless.
    Sucks that now are difficult times for you but it draws out beautiful literature for sure.

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