this shud have been posted b4 thank you but meh Emptiness around me. No one, not a single soul, to rescue me. I stand alone, crying glass tears. They have fled, they're own directions. I talk to they're spirits with frozen words. My lips are blue, I ache from the inside. Left only with a minute flame burning, yet fuelless. I have found you, yet lost you. The second of happiness, held close. Lost in the crowd, looking for a face I know but they fail to recongise me. Why?Am I that bad? Spinning in chaotic motion, out of control, wrapped in a spiral of black ice, I hit the floor. My mind grasped by negativity, waiting to be erased. Looking into the horizon, I search for my lighthouse. ( sorry about any spelling mistakes ) enjoy
I liked the poem. I really liked the expression "Crying glass tears". And then the line "Wrapped in a spiral of black ice" is also very clever. But the last line of the 5th stanza, "Why?Am I that bad?" is kinda dull. I suggest you change that, make it a little more subtle. Apart from that, this is good stuff. Keep it up.