~Paigaam-The Message~

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by BubblyMartini, Feb 12, 2006.

  1. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    ~Paigaam- The Message~

    Muskuraon na itna ki aansu chalak jaye
    Khushi chaho na itni ki gum ko guroor aa jaye
    Gum bayaan karne ke liye
    Pemaane chalakne ka intezar na karo
    Dil udaas ho jaye to yu chup-chupke aahe na bharo

    Kaun kisse haasil hua hai yaha
    Jeena bhi toh hai ik saaza yaha
    Mushkil hoti hai jub dil ki awaaz kho jati hai
    Dil kuch kehta hai nazare kuch aur kehelwati hai
    Ladkhadate hue kuch lafz bhi nikal aaye
    To do ghadi saansain ruk jaye

    Na karo intezaar gar hum laut na aaye
    Na yaad karo hume chahe dhundli si koi yaadein bhi yaad aaye
    Is duniya ki raangeen-neya na hume bhaye
    Is sheher ki chaandani hume raas na aaye
    Taaron se baatain bohot ho chuki
    Us chaand ko shikyat bhi bohot kar chuki
    Manzilon pe nazar rakhe hum bohot door chale aaye
    Phaasle kuch yu badh gaye ki hum bohot aage nikal aaye


    Good bad or horribly ugly Please gimme your honest comments..:eek::

    PS-Thanks for reading even if you havent posted your comments
    Hardik, akkyy21 and bjr like this.
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Manzilon pe nazar rakhe hum bohot door chale aaye
    Phaasle kuch yu badh gaye ki hum bohot aage nikal aaye.....
    but all in all this one is a not very good....bubbly y dont u write some thing lovely .... kuch chumma-chaati ..... ched kaani ...bhel puri ;-D
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    nah..am not good at that:)

    Thanks for your comments dude
    um....u didnt like this poem?
  4. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    @madhuresh,Most people arent as erotic-prone as you are, lay off.
  5. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    OO,.. now am cryin my ass off,... they say this too right? i mean y only laff ass's out.

    so senti.. so nice.. so touching,.. so amazing,.. so cool,.. so brilliant,.. so lalala

    u gettin reps babe.

    @ madhuresh : chumma chaati,.. aap kidhar se aaye ho? itna chaatne ke liye kyun taras raahe ho? n yes,. u may wanna meet vishwaor his aliass.
  6. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    thats the logic its self girl ....do it .....explore that world na...how many people said to u ...foolis girl u r not good at this.....or like what akky is telling me tehn see the results ...who knows u here ...u of couse cant do such a thing in practical life,,,??kyaa khayaaal haaaaaaaaaaaii
  7. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    good one bubbly....you are writting good stuff at this pace..wow...

    why dont you take one step ahead and record your poem in your voice and send us the link. Mood, emotion and message embedded in the poem can best be communicated using voice.

    All the best!
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    thanks for the suggestion dude
    i'l try that someday:)
  9. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

  10. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    Really Nice .....

    Sorry cant rep ....
  11. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    wow...its b-e-a-utiful...
    the title felt like some bollywood movie,but the poem was excellent..
    hats-off martina:)
  12. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!


    Toumhara " Paighaam " hamein bahout acha lagaa !

    Take care


  13. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Hey Hardik and Amanush
  14. taxyse

    taxyse t3h.

    ^ i took 13 steps to nowhere....if u know what i mean....i cant find a way out...cant even post it here ...and i aint writin ne thing othr than what i have written...wat say??:eek::
  15. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    bahot khoob...!
  16. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    thanks Nimisha :)

    n taxyse..thanks for reading my poem dude:)
  17. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    good one!!
    btw..i like the title
    it strikes the movie name-Daag-The fire..... in me;)
  18. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    :)thanks ansh

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