Oh Yeah !!! ( one more try in erotica )

Dear all,

I hope this time it doesn't turn out to be funny...


enough of words exchanged..
enough thoughts revealed..
its the time to go to bed..
u.. i and that cozy shed..


cool breeze blowing..
senses are just rolling..
you come closer to me..
and smooch me..


tear off ur clothes..
take of ur shoes..
bite ur lips..
grab ur hips..


sometimes u on me..
sometimes i on u..
no barrier between the skins..
love love n love means..


ur eyes tease me..
ur touch please me..
only the tonge rolls..
on the big boobs..

i m on u moan..
senses all gone..
fragnances say..
Oh Yeah !!!!



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Vishwa

 

only the tonge rolls..
on the big balls..
...............................

man ur retard heh cuz for that one have to take a rib out :think:

 

Funny....(maybe unintetionally)

 

no replies.. :

 

cut the crap out pal. ur erotica is gonna go over board n that too without a life jacket. ok serious note: that aint so gud . u shudnt get motivated in writing such stuff. instead of being sensual its gettin ***ualy explicit. i guess thats enough a message for you. bubye n TAKE CARE! i am not so buzzed off as it might sound.chillz

 

Unintentionally funny. Dude, i'm being dead serious (and a 15 year old as well), but this seems like a 12 year old's attempt. I mean you cant change the theme a lot, but you could change the execution.....(this is an OPINION).

 

muahhahahahahahahahhaa


i now agree with dennis

we must get vishwa's threads published!!

 

see^^^.....haha, we cud name it Mast Vishwa

 

muhahaahahahaha @ dennis

 

am still thinking abt you singing and playing this infrot of public .. lol big balls and stuff haha they gonna crack up at this part am sure kid

 

not a bad try.....bus thoda compact hona tha....some more of hidden meanings ..thoda jyaada khulla- khulla hai bas... may be like this if u say

satraight towards me as u walk...
last thing on ur mind is to talk....
this hurts, thats soft
senses all wild and silence aloft...

pata nahi is this crappy?

 

heh i dun even wanna talk abt it more cuz it won't go anywhere
u know what i mean heh

 

Funny Again!

 

Kya baat hai yaar ... sab kuch khol ke rakh diya ..

:rock:

 

Or,.... say,.... Vishwa ki Jawani!

 

LMAO@ vishwa ki jawani

now abt the poem... err... it's bad..... (that's jst what i think)

and the tongue rolling part was sick

 

umm well not really heh abt the rolling part ....

think someone else is goin to ya lol if u think ur self doin it ofcrse u'll feel sick

haha jusy playing man
keep rocking

 

:RollLol: .. Vishwa its high time u understand dat there is a thin line between EROTICA and POR.N .. juz becoz their spellings Are so different doesn't mean they can be messed wid :RollLol:

 

Vishwa instead of B**Bs u can use hidden hills what for man ? i bet u copy these stuffs from P.orn sites or like that or do u write for them ???

 

this is not at all erotic. Sounds like somebody is trying his/her hand at sentence formation after reading Human Digest for the first time....

Vishwa...dude...i recommend reading some daniel steele and some of the aforementioned literature together...i mean...side by side.. hehe