holding the hand making the seven rounds around fire promised to fullfill all the desires and give the serenity and happiness heard the mantra spoken by person whom i am handing over my preciousness making her more responsible saw her growing more compact and matured in terms of wordly matters... did as father i can do.. agreed to the person she wants to get married she was happy... making us as well..... with teary eyes bid adieu to our daughter to intiate her new life.. to carry on with our thoughts what we have taught her.. those principles of life... watched her childhood albums to pacify our heart to soothe our emotions... her absence looked like years passed on without her.. one day news came to me.... she was dead.... her husband burnt her alive.... with the same fire around he has taken oath to take care of her..... rohit astroguru26
Honestly, all the poems written on those interesting themes of yours seem exactly the same. Oh well, except the theme itself. I'm sure you can make 'em better! Just try a different approach, just for a change. Try a different style and although you might not like it initially, your experimentation might lead you to something really good. But, ofcourse, if you're happy with the way you right, carry on
good theme..and as cryptic said ur style needs a little polishing........though topic is very powerful but way u present it makes the real reason fade away.
yes... theme is as usual great... ur every poem is bit like narration of past... would like to see something different from you one day... try different styles...
