no war

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by har1s, Dec 9, 2005.

  1. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    hey ppl..wel umm im very bad at lyrics and poems...this is my 1st 1 n just wrote it last here goes

    terrorism is the illness of this world
    respect of the innocent is being sold
    war against terrorism is just a title
    that has been given to cover
    the deaths of the innocent young and old
    in their ayes can be seen, the fear that they behold
    why doesnt everyone unite 2gether?
    and fight for their rights ?
    victims of the terrorism,
    raise ur heads and be bold..!
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    nice to see ppl trying their hand at poetry :)

    i can see u tried to rhyme it at places, but it doesnt follow a proper pattern throughout...

    and when u write, dont forget to check for typos (ayes) and ur writing abt a very serious issue here, so no chat lingo (2gether)

    but it's a good effort.. write more n u'll get better at it!!

  3. Songs of peace


    Nice try son.

    There hasn't been a good protest song since the 60's. and
    We need one desprately. Its good to see you having a go.

    But your lyrics should include the cliches that were used to sell us the illegal war on terrorism.

    This will grab the attention of all because it is has been brain washed into our minds by the purveryors of war.

    Use it back against them and lets them know we won't be fooled by them anymore.

    I think if we all send you some verses especially by the talented angel we can come up with something special.

    Start a new thread on this and request verses/ lines /etc.

    I am only a newbie but I know already there is a heck of a lot of talent out there.

    Musician and artist throughout history have always been in the forefront of peace.
  4. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    thnx 4 da comments and advices @cryptic and waleed...ill surely try to improve this stuff.. :)
  5. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    no more comments ppl ?
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^another #ir@ ??? he he...just kidding....
    a very nice try harls....& gud to c that u hv chosen a very sensitive topic to start with....just keep :rock:ing... :)

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