Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by idefixe, Mar 29, 2006.

  1. idefixe

    idefixe New Member

    I just came up with this this on lonely night...........nights just facinate me & it is one of my favourate times.........just wanted to write somethin about it.....hope u guys like tell me what u'll think of it....and hey i wanna hear somethin abt my signature also

    Silence of the night,
    A muse or evil delight
    Wrenching shadows all around
    A wonderful and deadly sight
    Just voices in the dark playing their tunes
    The hissing of the wind so profound
    A dogma, unwavering beliefs,
    The ghosts and the thieves

    Sound of silence talks
    No one else is talking here
    Thoughts brewing in the head
    And the unfolding fear
    So alluring, so pretentious
    Magic here, tragic there
    Everything about this night
    Makes u long, makes u fonder
    Bringing on the wilder side
    Bringing on mystery
    Nights will come & they will hide
    Most fascinating time it’s got to be.
  2. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    kool.. right angle....:beer: angle = angel :confused:
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    its good..
    but feel like you were on the brink of rambling in the last part

    Nights will come & they will hide
    Most fascinating time it’s got to be."

    you could've added something more to this

    otherwise..overall its good..
    i like the first stanza..
  4. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    its nice..
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Loved the lines in bold. Those lines really bring forth the beauty and mystery of the night.

    Wonderful poem :)

    EDIT: What's with the title "Night-angle" :confused:
  6. #iR@


    good work :)
  7. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    their's a word in hindi anglebazee sure this angle has smthing to do with it.......
    ya poem is good :beer:

    ye RAAT........vo video dekha hai mast lagti hai bandi...
  8. idefixe

    idefixe New Member

    Hey thanx everyone.....sachoo...bubly( i do apreciate the constructive criticism).......#iR@, madhuresh.......nimisha ( u do write well)....and crptic u too

    The title just means perception of the to how it is in the night........the title just seemed catchy
  9. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    nice one...............i can picture u writing this stuff under a candle.
  10. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    I don't like the title :phbbt:

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