need comments for - The Perfect Summer

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by idefixe, Feb 3, 2006.

  1. idefixe

    idefixe New Member

    Hey everyone out there ....need comments for this poetry
    new to this forum .............just getin 2 knw evry one
    hoope u'll wil read and reply..........

    bye.....for now.

    The Perfect Summer

    Summer skies endless bounds
    Reaching places not been before
    Searching forests for that enduring light
    Life’s so amazing
    Dive in to the Coral waters
    Revel in the shining sands
    Some space enchanting
    Besiege the moment

    Flapping wings going the distance
    Flocks of birds Bon voyage
    Vast spaces and eternal seas
    Sweating it out the honey bees
    Grazing cattle on open fields
    Lost in lovely serenity
    Rotund mangoes, trudging carts,
    Afternoon slumber and lemon tarts
    Holding hands, taking walks,
    Quietest times and endless talks
    Wandering freely gone away
    Precious little moments
    Longing for the perfect summer
  2. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    stupendous imagination is all what i can say!!! nice flow...well done all together.( refered my dictionary after a long time though :p ) i liked it.
  3. idefixe

    idefixe New Member


    thanks sharmom for the comments.
    really appreciate them.................
    And everyone out there .....just keep the commnts flowing in...........

    BYe for now...........
  4. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Kool stuff....

    "Holding hands, taking walks,
    Quietest times and endless talks "

    Nice composition all together.
    Gud to have another poet here.

  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Nice imagery.. :)
  6. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    I think thats wat comes to evry kids mind wen told to write a essay "My Vacation"

    Just my thought,..
  7. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ^^ hahaha..

    but dude, nice thoughts.....compose this too...

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