Had this writer's block for long time now. but my friend Nick just forced me to scratch my brains and write something.. here's is the thing we wrote last night, combine efforts.. Nascence The rain hangs high as my breath escapes me and my blood begins to boil... Like vapors of my cells leaving me bit by bit, when i sigh The long walk I had begun with footsteps so deliberate, propelled by gallant ambitions.. And fleeting glimpses of a heart to return to.... But can not go back.. I set ablazed the bridge to my past.. Now this present is for my future and future can only be my present.. So my every gesture means to hurl itself against this aura of white heat, And I feel the depths of me become as tempered steel, where tenderness once moved against confusion... Now no muddle , no mess.. but I should confess.. Its not just the pain of revival for 'to be' but it is indeed strain to devour the 'yore'.. In truth what now moves me is purely mundane, even as minerals my passion combust, so consumed is the clarity which I must mourn, of placenta, of the dew... Those lucid wrought of crystals.. like hayaline thought.. I wish I knew so I sigh.. I walk this long walk.. my breath escapes.. as rain hangs high..
its real, its good, and great words for expression..... i think no1 commented cuz of rhymes.... i think its 1 great thing...
I never expected to get comments on my poetries since I am not active in this forum. But madhuresh and horsemouth, you guys made me feel good. Thanks for your appreciation, feels like writing something again..
this ws reaaly a gud poem.. kahin thoor thikana kar rakhiye, sab apne ghar chal jane hain ye jo ajj badi si bheed yahan, ye sab kal se bee maane hai Pehchaan na payega koi, tera naam bhi koi le lega.. par likh ke jayega geet jo tu ye lavz yahin reh jaane hain.. .................... Im a fan of urs nimmo
nimisha ----this is simply outstanding lyrics made by u....i think ur past was a pandora's box of many uneasy tantrums...ahh but intellectually rolled into in depth impression in form of words...brilliant workdone...i like this one . vikisviks
...................................................NO Doubt....................................... ........................................That was really Co___ol............................... Specially.....Now this present is for my future and future can only be my present...... ...................................That was smthing easy 2 write but hard......................... 2 cope with d rest of it