Nailed

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Nanda, Mar 1, 2005.

  1. Nanda

    Nanda Bassist

    Nailed

    Filled with rage at a very young age
    there was no way i would listen to the sage
    i lost my life at a very young age
    there was no way i could turn my page

    i had a dad who always made me sad
    there was no one to listen to miseries i had
    they always said i was a miserable lad
    there was no way the could make me mad

    people who go against the world, are always called one
    i wanted to live the way i want, and never cared for being called one

    driven outta house at 15
    i was already dead by 13
    the world was dead to me by 14
    i claimed lucifer was my slave at 19

    kids pelted stones at my head
    when i said i was dead
    when i turned back they fled
    i used to smash them till they bled

    the mad called me mad
    the whole worlds mad
    the whole worlds sad
     
  2. Nirvanafreak

    Nirvanafreak Official Freak

    wow...that one's really amazing,seems like it's all about my life :p:
     
  3. rockin'away

    rockin'away Banned

    wow... so much rhyme!.. great poem.... some more great ones and i shall give u reps:).. shame no one ever gives me any
     
  4. maverick8218

    maverick8218 New Member

    Hey nanda, I think You have emphasized a li'l too much on rhyme, but on the whole nice effect... keep rockin' dude...
     
  5. Nanda

    Nanda Bassist

    Thanks for the suggestion Maverick I will try not to rhyme too much(So that it wont spoil what i want to convey)
     

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