My hopes,My Moon. I walk by the lake, and stop in amazement, to see the walking moon stop too. I stare at my image, the ripples in the water defacing it, making me a complete stranger. is this how we look at life ? or is this what life makes us ? an ugly,blemished creature. I wait till the water simmers down, and my image is a reflection of the real me. is it? is this how we wait ? for the ripples of our lives to calm down. I moved on, but left behind my moon, my hopes. _________________________________________________________________ another quickie, just wrote as came in my mind. do provide ur valuable comments and suggestions.
^Wonderful poem, i strive for this level of simplicity in my poems. It was well organized, the theme was good and the ideas connected, this effort really clicked for you, if i may though, i'd like to offer the services of a proofreader and with your permission fix all the grammatical errors without changing any part of the poem, totally up to you.
I never give too much attention to the kind of vocab i use...it just comes out my heart/my mind and i dont edit it once i write it. U can be my guest till the time u do justice to my concept/theme.
To the point and couldnt be explained any better sometimes complex words confuse a person... Nice poem walk_alone
thxs bubbly...appreciate ur thought..........words have to come from within from the vocab u posess....i cant luk at dictionary for complex words for simple feelings. thts my style
Different people have different styles some prefer to keep things complex and conceal the true image not many can stick to one style its really good that you can...
MAIN PSPO nahi jaanta what does this poem mean ...he was seeing moon's shadow in water then ? he thought he is belmish? then? kyaa hai ye?
This is what i mean. Hi Madhuresh, Glad u asked me that question...maybe i want to make it clear to myself too. Lake signifies our lives and moon signifies our hopes to achieve our desires. our expectations to achieve those desires sometimes create ripples in our lives which brings in misery and distress....we continue to hope or let ripples of our lives end so that we can be what we actually are, not what our desires make us. and then when we realise that our desires are something that cannot be achieved then we leave our moon...our hopes behind in search of a new lake. I hope i made it quite clear.
Thanks Cryptic......its gud to hear these encouraging wirds from you. Garima ji ...thxs to u too ...u cd take out some time to read my poem atleast.
Great one walk-alone... You do write as it comes out from ur heart...Keep it up, it's the actual trait of a poet. Merely words cannot express the heart, if they don't stand for an idea... In your case the idea is super...excited to see more of ur work.
thats it man good comparision......ya every one feels his own way....but still ...abhi pooch hi leta hoon... r u sure u think that way (i had the same question initially)...??