some of you might recall ma fart poem ... hehehe that one went pretty well .. this time i have gone a bit serious ... it is a private poem ... but what the heck ... hey! listen i've got something to say its like i was born a long time ago but opened my eyes today i just found something warm a feeling so pure that it makes rain pour down my cheeks i actually love you, strange neva felt like this before or was i dead all the time? i dunno if i wanted anything this pure were my desires made out of stone? was that a cloud or some sheath? were my hands tied to my feet? that i couldnt reach out and touch you deep maybe now i will know what i am supposed to do die like a dragon? or live like a dream?
if its crap its crap ... just smack me with it .. lol no need to patronise! even the person for whom it was meant went .... @duh whats this?@ ahhahaha
i personally think u should have wrote the poem more.....as a poem. it sounds like a conversation rather than a poem. well, good try.
hey thnx everyone .. true i messed it up in the end .. but i said what i wanted to ... didnt had time to make it rhyme or flow like sonic sheets of silk though the space of my thoughts.... as someone would put it thnx again.
Awesome....cnt say about the rythm...but yh i wanna say that anythng that comes out of heart is rythmic...cos if u listen the sound of ur heart, even thats rythmic. Good one
