My second song

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Ali Akber, Dec 22, 2005.

  1. Ali Akber

    Ali Akber New Member

    plzzz comment

    teri yaadien
    hoon gee na kabhi kum
    tu jab yaad aye
    bhola do mein saarey gum
    tu jab aye
    to mit jaye sarey gum

    yeh jo lamhe hein
    yeh muskello se guzre hein
    yeh jo pal hein
    unhay bitta na sakey hum
    tu jo chahay to
    bhula doon mein sarey gum

    yeh yaad sata-ey teri
    zindayi katey na meri
    yeh armaan sarey meray
    porey hoon ge kabhi

    yeh yaadien pori nahi
    yeh khaab adhoray nahi
    yeh armaan sarey merey
    porey hoon ge kabhi

    hoon ge porey kabhi
    hoon ge porey kabhi
    hoon ge porey kabhi………..
     
  2. Bleeding Guitar

    Bleeding Guitar New Member

    umm :S am confused
    this is like some Jals song, i dun know man its good though, but seriously it reminds me of jal's some song anywayz correct me if am wrong or missunderstood.
     
  3. Ali Akber

    Ali Akber New Member

    this is an original

    hey man...sorry to say but this time i tried my best and made it original...last time i copied a lil of bikhra hoon mein but this time this is mine
     
  4. Bleeding Guitar

    Bleeding Guitar New Member

    oh Okay bro .. if u did then as i said they are good lyrics .. keep up the good work
     
  5. Aka Oz

    Aka Oz /\K/\ - Ozy

    thumbs up...good wrk bro
     
  6. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    @ bleeding....some words n rhythm copied from ik din ayega by jal.... n ali... nice effort in editing the lyrics...but plz try n post sumthing original...
     
  7. Ali Akber

    Ali Akber New Member

    thnx for the support ppl...and this has really encouraged me...next song i post will be an original....THNX ALOT!
     
  8. Aka Oz

    Aka Oz /\K/\ - Ozy

    welcome buddyyy
     
  9. Bleeding Guitar

    Bleeding Guitar New Member


    but u said this was already original :s
     

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