~My PrEcIoUS vOiD~ As the clock ticks away..everyone keeps up running about for something.. The needles meet and split again a zillion times.. So the man chases his wishes ageing, standing, dreaming something.. We meet, forget, regret, beget.. yet never ends the counting.. But welcome to this side i have lots of time to gaze at grass,moon and sky.. I wait for you and wait for the needles to meet sometimes so as you come nigh.. For we could sit at the pavement and talk nothing but watch the world go by....... Just another state of mindish not so poem like sounding poem!
For we could sit at the pavement and talk nothing but watch the world go by....... ^ simple, yet, something that i really would like to do with my girl ... aah .. you are right vini, time goes so fast, and we take so many silly things as they come, never realizing that there are some downright simple thigns that can mean so much to us, that we ignore .. and secretly, i think we do yearn for them ... read your poem 3 times .. but still dont get a few lines, maybe they belong to you thats why .. only you can understand them, and to be honest i didnt even get the idea behind this poem ...... nevertheless .. love this one .. it is one of those which one can relate to oneself, just like that!!
^^ even i dont know what i've tried to put forth with the help of some words..ur right they belong to my own/personal thoughts! thanx to u and cryptu anyway!
Lovely title to your poem. Even though it was short, it wasn't incomplete. The poem makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside and I cuddle upto my pillow as I read this. hah, admit it...you used "nigh" to rhyme
OMG.. u people can write so good.. i m no where around u ppl.. nice poem.. nice title... nice thoughts.
it reminds me of the song 'cloud#9-Bryan Adams'...the line..'we can watch the world go by...up on cloud#9'.....loves the song...loved ur poem too
