just a few lines i wrote the other day.......... although they mean nothing just my imagination.......... do give sum feedback........... I remember That wave of carefree laughter Like ripples on blue water Like autumn wind rustling through leaves Around me , a deadly magic which weaves I hear as before The music of your voice Like sweet bells ringing Like a thousand cuckoos singing Like rain falling on a tree I hear and I know ,you’re still inside me. I dream of your eyes Like night on a sandy beach Like moon filtering through the jungle A flash of white lightning And A fire roaring……consuming Wherever i look its u i see I know I’m trapped , never to be free In the night I lie staring at the ceiling You’ve given me wounds ,never healing. Witn tears stifled I try to smile My fault for I loved a creature vile The watch seems jammed My breath seems stuck The heart beats slow throbbing with pain I cry ,I laugh I live in vain Struggling with joy and with sorrow With you and myself,with everyone When at last I feel the light Another night past ,I feel the sun......
dude grt poem but avoid so much rhyming coz then it sounds like one of the poems that young kids have for their texts
mast poem hai boss! its superb stuff! xcept for this part whihc i found :RollLol: Code: thousands of cuckoos singing
thx thanks guys ..........i completely understand abt that cuckoo line . .... its jus that smtimes when i can think of nothing else..... i usually invent sm rubbish to maintain the rhyme scheme..... earlier i was actually thinking of "christmas.......... bells.......... ringing " n stuff but it sounded equally dumb so i ignored it..........neways if u have anything else to replace that line do post it..........thx
ansh lets see frm u yaar............likh daal do tin tu bhi..ill also resume after my exams r over.....all guitar poets r here.....
