my love for you...............

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by deepakatreya, Dec 20, 2004.

  1. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    you may not see in me,
    what i see in you

    you may not feel ,
    what i feel
    but my immortal love for you,
    theese mortal boundaries of world cant conceal

    however hard my love,
    i try to take you out of my mind,
    but yet again i find;
    reflection of my eternal love in your eyes,
    then my soul flies,
    and my heart cries ,
    for your love.

    seeds of love in my heart you sow,
    cant be expressed in words i know.
    my love is like a flower in the wild;
    and a tide,
    in a ocean so wide;
    i hope through them you would sail;
    in the calm and in the gale,
    making my love a timeless tale.
     
  2. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    w-0-w man, amazing one, the last stanza was really heart touching piece... well done pal.. keep up the good work
     
  3. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    thank u pal.......i am happy to know that atleast it could touch a heart....
     
  4. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    really man i was really emotional reading "making my love a timeless tale."
     
  5. itsme_amit

    itsme_amit New Member

    very good....
    deepa i read it today....
    then read it twice...
    read it thrice...
    its beautiful....
    truly it touches heart..
    it makes me remember..
    draws me further to my past..
    and guides me for future....
    very nice poem...
    do keep riting...
     
  6. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Amazing poem deepak, really. Touched my heart:) Looking forward to more from you dude:)
     
  7. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

     
  8. itsme_amit

    itsme_amit New Member

    i m sorry....
    still ur pom was very nice...
     
  9. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    its ok pal ,no problem.........thank u ...............
     
  10. slamdunk

    slamdunk New Member

    hey deepak... a nice one.. amazing... heart touching.......reminds of my college days..... u know right...... Hey gives me "nasha" of 2 Quarters of OLD MONK.... Give some more nasha if u have...
     
  11. DesiPride143

    DesiPride143 BEHAVE!

    very nice.....just what i need to read today....thanx deepak
     
  12. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    @desipride...........thank u pal.......
    @slamdunk...........more nasha is on the way ...........wait............i shall be posting one more today.......
     
  13. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    @slamdunk..............did u read the latest one............
     
  14. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    We did and we loved it as well dude:)
     
  15. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Hey deepak, I think U love somebody otherwise U couldn't have written a poem so touching.... It really touched me.... Keep it up...
     
  16. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    @sanjay.......thanks pal..........u guessed it right man........but unfortunately she does not seem to understand..........
     
  17. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Oh it happens. Don't worry. If your love is true, she will be yours one day. And if she doesn't, she will lose a person like U, and for which she will realize one day. But I'll pray to the Almighty, so that she becomes yours..... Best of luck.....
     
  18. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    @sanjay thanks a lot buddy..................
     
  19. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Always by your side......
     

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