MY :: LOST...............(( i m...))

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by abhimanjrekar, Apr 16, 2006.

  1. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    long time i ve come up with original...couldnt think of ne title,so put it...


    lost in the darkness,
    im searchin for the light,
    the hand of power,
    that guides me forever.

    its been days,
    im going on and on,
    i don seem to get,
    the right path to move on.

    liitle is the scope,
    for me to get back,
    times gone by,
    lookin for the things i lack.

    its just for a walk,
    for me to go,
    looking for the light,
    even just the faintest glow.......
    Sanjay Mazumder and astroguru26 like this.
  2. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    little ambiguous to comprehend but thats so coz possibly its state of mindish

    apparently a good effort!
  3. uj_6string

    uj_6string Nickelodean Addict :D

    nice....good effort....
    but frankly abhi, u r better with your light and funny stuff rather than such dark stuff....
    dosent suit u....
  4. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    yeah man..i l do time rite now amongst submissions and all..this one took hardly 1 minute..jus went on writin and then posted ...neways thx for reading..

    @ vini, thank u...
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    i thought u r giving exams..
    but u r writting poems instead...

    abhyaas kar re...

    but...yes..a good efforts..
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    its always nice to see something a lil serious from u......good effort !!
  7. #iR@


    nice work man! :)
  8. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    thk u u 3 sweetie pies..

    @ nimi, i wrote it in the study break of one minute.....
  9. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^y dont u invest some more time....if in 1 min u came up with this gving it sm more time u'll do wonders...
  10. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    Yaar,im already doing wonders drawing sheets and writing assignments till 3 am..term end started re now with submissions and vivas and theory following...i l hardly be writin i guess try if i get time.....
  11. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    A pleasant change from the dreadful parodies. It's heartening to see you at least try.

    As for the poem, I didn't like it but that's okay. First of all, the idea wasn't good enough for me. It's okay for a verse or two but there just isn't enough content in your verse. I think you should merge the 4 verses into 1 or 2 and then expand upon your idea.
  12. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    ^^ will keep tht in mind next time...thx for the reading...
  13. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Hey Abhi, I too used to write such poems earlier but don't write those now..... Well, I like that!

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