heres another poem i rote today... comments are always welcomed! My life; taken over! They mock They torture They rule Their rage Their resentment Their pride Leave us Where we r today In this darkness Which was once endurable I refuse I suffer I ignore Yet I smile Smile at myself Cause I live a life that was once mine I mock Mock at myself Cause I live a life that was once mine What sort of a life do I lead? With just commands To fulfill With just orders To accept With lips That r sealed Its time to get back Back at them! It’s time to make them realize Who we r And who we have turned into! comments plzz...
Hira Iam not just replying for the sake of replying but there is a volcano ready to burst out....u r a rebel for sure. Nice selection of words. Amazing thts all i can say.
well done hira....I like the way this poem is written....short half cut sentences which are communicating the whole feeling...just remarkable...
@ sweetie... thanks a lot for the reps and ur comments! @ walk_alone... thanks a lot man! @ abhi... thanks man! means a lot! @ amit... thanks! thanks a lot all of u!!!!!!!!!!
Yet I smile Smile at myself Cause I live a life that was once mine hmm goood ..i heard somethng realted ..."when some one commits a mistake and smiles he know, whome to blame for it"
hira last time i commented u have nice ideas..but need to work on writting skill.... but this poem is very well written.... wud have given reps.. but gotta spread more...
@ nimisha... thanks a lot gurl! @ ujsen... well... i don't know, i guess i think a lot!and about wat u and walk_alone said... i won't say anything! thanks for reading though!
hey,how come i missed this one....its gr8 hira,..reminds me of my "its better in hell.." poem....cool...i liked it very much
hey #iR@ ... this poem is extremely opposite to ur id (gandi bacchi) ... bahut hi acchi poem ... very well written ...incomplete sentences convey the full msg .. good choice of words. .. very well written ..... :nw:
@ hardik... thanks a lot man! always looking forward to ur comments! @ metal_fan69... thanks for the reps... means a lot! @ nimitr... WOW... THANKS A LOT MAN!!!!! TRUST ME I FEEL GREAT! @ everyone.... $t0p CaLlING me a GANDI BACHI! :annoyed:
dont mind #iR@ ... i luv calling u GANDI BACHI .. coz whenever i say it i actually mean ACCHI BACHI ....
