My Heart...paining

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Sharmontime, Feb 4, 2006.

  1. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    My Heart

    This heartache of mine
    New in this shrine
    Neither its loss of love
    Nor loss of life
    But betraying a confidante.

    How to exress this pain
    for such an act of mine
    what under earth will i gain
    hurting your heart again.

    Saw in your eyes the hateful
    I put down my head remorseful
    I felt myself groggy
    Took over by pang, I groan.

    This is a heartful beseech
    from a seemingly callous creature
    forgive me for my behaviour
    for you are indulgent
    you'll let bygones be bygones
    Perceptive enough to bury the hatchet. ​

    Now please do tell me hows this one...obliged to hear from you all.
    Sharmontime :cool:
  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    funny thing called a heart
    you got a smiley to this thread..that explains it all ;)

    the words are wonderful
    its good to have you here..

    Take care..
    God Bless..
  3. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    yeah...but that smiley was though not intentional...jus wanted not make my post so remorseful...thanks a lot for your appreciation. i m indeed blessed. :dance: :dance:
  4. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    hmm its nice sharmon..really gripping. I dont know, but near the end i wanted there to be more..i wsnt ready for the abrupt ending!! ;)

    great going kid. keep it up.
  5. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    n e ways....that was a good notice by you. ;)
    however i'll try to add one more stanza before the last one...that shud do..
    ( thougt abt it jus now though..shud verify if that'll live up to and keep the poems up to the mark...)
    as it is actually whn i wrote that i suppose that was what i wanted to tell him...i mailed him this poem the next moment.
    and btw you called me "kid"??? :mad: ... you not more than 4 months elder to me and u call me kid? :eek::

    and everyone else out tell hows this... wud love to listen more from you all...


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