My first poem post

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by smitzonian, May 23, 2006.

  1. smitzonian

    smitzonian New Member

    I write alot of poetry (http://smitzonian.googlepages.com/)... and now that i am learning the guitar someday i will write tunes for all my poems...and sing them :)

    my first poem for this forum .. if anyone is interested in co-composing pm me ..

    I am still Alive.

    A bond we share is so strong, with death it cannot die
    I am not breathing anymore, but I am still alive

    You cannot hear me , I am not visible to your eyes
    As long as I am in your heart I am still alive

    You are sad , and unhappy and I know you will cry
    But if you smile again , you will know I am still alive

    I may not be a part of your daily life
    But if I am in your thoughts , I am still alive

    When you look at the sea , you will find me in every tide
    When you go for a walk , you will find me walking side by side


    Whenever you wish to meet me, look up into the sky
    I am in every cloud, every star, in every bird that can fly

    In this world, you shall always realize,
    That no matter what “I am still alive”

    smitzonian
     
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  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Reminded me of "Alive" by Pearl Jam.

    Hey Smitzonian...honestly i think you need to spend some more time on your composition, luks like you have been rhyming words just for sake of it.Try free prose.

    but nice for first attempt..atleast on IGT.

    Njoy!!

     
  3. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    nice poem... keep posting! :cool:
     
  4. jayesh_diu123

    jayesh_diu123 New Member

    hello good yaar really nice poem.
     
  5. smitzonian

    smitzonian New Member

    Rhyming lines adds a rhythm to my thoughts ... so me rhyming for the sake of rhyming is probably an incorrect remark. Thats just the way i prefer writing...

    i am glad the rest liked it .. will keep posting more..

    Cheers
    Smitzonian
     

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