:::: My first original ever ::::

Hi Folks,

Have a listen to my first original song. Well the lyrics are from some of Madonna's number which I never heard. I tweaked the lyrics to fit my music style.

It took me full 8 hours to make it happen ..right from tweaking the lyrics to finding a a style n mood for the song. I even watched Pocahontas and Mulan to get into the right kind of mood.

well guys feel free to send me ur coments/suggestions. This song is for my prev. organisation....how I miss them...

https://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=448364&songID=4685601



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WPSI(prev. comp. department) Song
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This used to be my playground
This used to be our pride and joy
This used to be the place we ran to
Whenever I was in need of u (x2)
This used to be my playground ....

---verse 1---

You should never look back
Keep ur head held high
but Don't ask them why
cause life is too short

And before you know
You're feeling old
Your heart is bleeding
and ur soul cry in pain

This used to be my playground
This used to be our pride and j hooy
This used to be the place we ran to
Whenever I was in need of u (x2)
This used to be my playground ....

---verse 2---

You should never regret
of all the things u had
cause those were the golden
moments of ur life

But now I wish that
you Were here with me
and I can see your face
In our secret place

---change pitch--

Why did it have to end
And why do they always say
Don't hold on to the past
Well that's too much to ask
You're not just a memory
you are in my hearttttttttt


never Say goodbye
The best things in life are free
I'll hold them till eternity
Wishing you were here with me


This used to be my playground
This used to be our pride and j hooy
This used to be the place we ran to
Whenever I was in need of u (x2)
This used to be my playground ....


naananan annnnaaa nanananana annanana

 

gud job .....nice composition!

reps

 

Sounds nice....good strumming but u`re filling the song with a lotta strums for the kinda mood this song has....an arpeggio version might sound good I think...

this used to my playground....try some falsetto at some places to shift octaves...

And yeah, for this to be ur 1st song, definitely reps for the effort!

 

hey nice compo man... liked the vocals and guitaring too... keep up the good work.. reps for sure...

P.S u inspired by Westlife? :think:

 

thank you Sanju_Strings, geniusoid and Devilshly_Pur$. I m glad that u like it ....

I will try to come up with a slower arpeggio version soon...

well Devilshly u r right i am infact inspired by all the top boy bands.....neways thanks for ur comments.....

 

very nice COMPO !!! reps for u !

 

thanks Ankur.. glad u like it.....

 

wonderful lyrics. Nice effort.

 

very nice attempt at making ur own comp...after sometime it got a little monotonous&u did let it be so..but yes i liked ur effort! very simple yet very nice....reps!!

 

thanks fictional (ur punch line contain lotta weight) and Vini

well I agree that it becomes monotnous after some time ... I tried to break it in the last para where I changed the tone but I guess I falied to hold listeners attention by then............ however I was so lost in playing n singin that I dint realise...

I liked geniusoid's idea of an arpeggio version...... but I will use it in my next original peice.

thank u all for listening n glad u like it ...