:::: My first original ever ::::

Discussion in 'IGT Soundtrack - Your Band, Your Gig, Your Music' started by ziblu_bhoot, Nov 20, 2006.

  1. ziblu_bhoot

    ziblu_bhoot New Member

    Hi Folks,

    Have a listen to my first original song. Well the lyrics are from some of Madonna's number which I never heard. I tweaked the lyrics to fit my music style.

    It took me full 8 hours to make it happen ..right from tweaking the lyrics to finding a a style n mood for the song. I even watched Pocahontas and Mulan to get into the right kind of mood.

    well guys feel free to send me ur coments/suggestions. This song is for my prev. organisation....how I miss them...

    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=448364&songID=4685601



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    WPSI(prev. comp. department) Song
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    This used to be my playground
    This used to be our pride and joy
    This used to be the place we ran to
    Whenever I was in need of u (x2)
    This used to be my playground ....

    ---verse 1---

    You should never look back
    Keep ur head held high
    but Don't ask them why
    cause life is too short

    And before you know
    You're feeling old
    Your heart is bleeding
    and ur soul cry in pain

    This used to be my playground
    This used to be our pride and j hooy
    This used to be the place we ran to
    Whenever I was in need of u (x2)
    This used to be my playground ....

    ---verse 2---

    You should never regret
    of all the things u had
    cause those were the golden
    moments of ur life

    But now I wish that
    you Were here with me
    and I can see your face
    In our secret place

    ---change pitch--

    Why did it have to end
    And why do they always say
    Don't hold on to the past
    Well that's too much to ask
    You're not just a memory
    you are in my hearttttttttt


    never Say goodbye
    The best things in life are free
    I'll hold them till eternity
    Wishing you were here with me


    This used to be my playground
    This used to be our pride and j hooy
    This used to be the place we ran to
    Whenever I was in need of u (x2)
    This used to be my playground ....


    naananan annnnaaa nanananana annanana
     
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  2. sanju_strings

    sanju_strings 50 Pai$e <3V/S<3 50 CeNt$

    gud job .....nice composition!

    reps
     
  3. geniusoid

    geniusoid Acoustic Alchemist

    Sounds nice....good strumming but u`re filling the song with a lotta strums for the kinda mood this song has....an arpeggio version might sound good I think...

    this used to my playground....try some falsetto at some places to shift octaves...

    And yeah, for this to be ur 1st song, definitely reps for the effort! :)
     
  4. hey nice compo man... liked the vocals and guitaring too... keep up the good work.. reps for sure...

    P.S u inspired by Westlife? :think:
     
  5. ziblu_bhoot

    ziblu_bhoot New Member

    thank you Sanju_Strings, geniusoid and Devilshly_Pur$. I m glad that u like it ....

    I will try to come up with a slower arpeggio version soon...

    well Devilshly u r right i am infact inspired by all the top boy bands.....neways thanks for ur comments.....
     
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  6. Ankur_Scorpio

    Ankur_Scorpio New Member

    very nice COMPO !!! reps for u !
     
  7. ziblu_bhoot

    ziblu_bhoot New Member

    thanks Ankur.. glad u like it.....
     
  8. fictional_real

    fictional_real Pyaasi Jawani

    wonderful lyrics. Nice effort.
     
  9. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    very nice attempt at making ur own comp...after sometime it got a little monotonous&u did let it be so..but yes i liked ur effort! very simple yet very nice....reps!! :)
     
  10. ziblu_bhoot

    ziblu_bhoot New Member

    thanks fictional (ur punch line contain lotta weight) and Vini

    well I agree that it becomes monotnous after some time ... I tried to break it in the last para where I changed the tone but I guess I falied to hold listeners attention by then............ however I was so lost in playing n singin that I dint realise...

    I liked geniusoid's idea of an arpeggio version...... but I will use it in my next original peice.

    thank u all for listening n glad u like it ...
     

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