My first original composition - FIRST LOVE - VAYU

guyz this is my first original composition.i hve written the lyrics,composed the song,sang and also played guitar. the song is titled First Love.plzzzz listen to it and ur feedbacks vil be appreciated!!!!

here's da link -

https://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=532902

Lyrics of my song-

FIRST LOVE - VAYU

I know i was a fool
to fall in love with you
And now i can't forget you
coz my heart just thinks about you
Am i da one 2 be blamed
When you are so beautiful as ur name..!!

I saw you in my class
the girl with the long hair
You smiled at me right there
I gave you my heart there

We went out on a date
I was sorry for being late
We talked with our eyes
and i dreamt of u all day
Am i da one 2 be blamed
When you are so beautiful as ur name..!!

I said I loved you
and you said that u do too
We were happy together
For now and forever

But it didn't last much
It was over before i knew
And now I'm singing this song 4 u.........!!!!

 

gr8 little composition
aptly titled god of guitar
i lyked man who sold the world too

 

hey GOG, its cool man...nice soft song...good guitaring...and the leads was good too!
may be u wud want to put the lyrics in the tread as well...so ppl can relate to it...while listening to the song....

 

Lyrics of my song-

FIRST LOVE - VAYU

I know i was a fool
to fall in love with you
And now i can't forget you
coz my heart just thinks about you
Am i da one 2 be blamed
When you are so beautiful as ur name..!!

I saw you in my class
the girl with the long hair
You smiled at me right there
I gave you my heart there

We went out on a date
I was sorry for being late
We talked with our eyes
and i dreamt of u all day
Am i da one 2 be blamed
When you are so beautiful as ur name..!!

I said I loved you
and you said that u do too
We were happy together
For now and forever

But it didn't last much
It was over before i knew
And now I'm singing this song 4 u.........!!!!

 

Duuude....U rock!!

 

@vin91 - thxs dude!!!

@krishnaG - thxs man 4 ur comments.u r rite man, with lyrics ppl vil be able to relate to da song more!!

@max_payne16 - thxs dude for putting those lyrics 4 me!!!!!

Rock on!!!!!

 

wowwwww.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!..

 

simply amazing... what a song...

 

Very well done man, you can be proud of yourself cause you did a good job.
A few things would make your composition complete as it would become a real song, try adding some drums, add a bassline and maybe some chords(pads, strings) in the background. The whole song would sound much better, please don't understand me wrong, i'm not tryinng to tell you what to do, these are just my suggestions.
And ofcourse, you have to improve the vocals cause its not sung very well (the Sur can be improved and most important, try singing with more feeling, passion etc.) , i heard alot of your songs and i think you are capable to do much better.
Overall, as i said, very well done, keep it up man!!!
Heard your other song too man, Labon ko - BHOOL BHULAIYA, its done very well too, take care man!!!

 

Hey!!

Cant find the song ... plzz send the link again ... well rest all ur covers r suprb ... great guitaring n very nice voice too .....

 

thxs a lot every1 for ur comments!!!! well, i hve re-recorded the song again. so do check it out!!!!!

 

Wow

Master piece man ....................... very nice .................... superb ..........

 

hey thxs lohit 4 listening my song and 4 ur comments!!!!