my cries

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Sharmontime, Jan 31, 2006.

  1. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    My cries are now without tears
    everything in this world have gone past my fears
    the pain that my heart experienced
    has overdone all that's a fleshy wound.

    My heart now has its turn to cry out loud
    pumping out, all the tears of blood
    making itself bluish black
    (still) people comment,"It's a foolish Jack."

    pls do tell hows' this. that shud tell my levels :D
  2. born2tab

    born2tab rhythm guitarist

    nice try??

    u shud do more...

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