my :: citadel

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by abhimanjrekar, Oct 21, 2005.

  1. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    here's my second one of my own....


    Wen the wind was dull,
    And the sky was low,
    In my life,there was no flow.
    It felt like,
    FATE had given me a huge blow.

    Amidst the clouds of darkness,
    There came the rays of hope,
    I knew i had to win,
    Even wen there was no scope.

    Frustration seemed to come in,
    Like an uninvited guest,
    Success was like a stranger,
    Who had been put to rest.

    But it was the belief within,
    Tht seemed to tell,
    Hey why r u livin,
    Like a citadel tht fell.

    I knew i was a soldier,
    Who was wounded in the war,
    But i had to rise up,
    To conquer this war,

    Now i m all fine,
    And risen on my feet,
    Im all rarin to go,
    To face life's scorchin heat,

    No matter how things become worse,
    Now i wont care,
    I'll surely rebuild the citadel,
    And this time,
    Without any wear and tear....
  2. #iR@


    nice............... the war wala stanza is PRETTY GOOD!!!!!! :)
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Hey Abhi!! u write well

    if like you said you've written Only two poems, do write some more ;)
  4. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    aree these were writtens some 2 yrs back...i had been goin through a very very bad phase..tabhi ka..u can see it in the emotions in poem..newayz thx all..will try writin more...
  5. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    aap "Abhi" bhi likh sakte ho :)
    looking forward to read them....

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