miss u...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, Jun 26, 2010.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i knw dat u r gonna find this a li'l wierd
    well dis is one thing dat i thot wud happen smday...actually dis is wat i feared ...
    i just felt like telin' u dat without u my world ain't complete
    i am fully aware that its not on daily basis dat v tok or meet
    i wish i cud tell u clearly how exactly do i feel...
    bt dat ain't possible...its too dark and selfish to reveal...i may not mean anythin' to u...not even a single kronore
    but u won't knw dat hw exactly do i feel at the core
    i wish i cud explain dat its not about the time... it's not about "hw long"
    its about the bond.....its bout "hw strong"i walk on the way u lead me to
    i try to see thru the eyes .. d vision ... dat u guide me to
    i d every damn thing dat u ask me to
    but all i want from u is dat dun' leav me alone .. life is too hard to get thru...
    i wish i cud tell u dat u r my real seraph, my shinin' star
    u knw me more than me ... and i never want u to b soo far
    i am aked over and over again wat do i feel bout friendship...
    to each questioner i handle an empty paper slip...
    4 d day i wud b able to "define" frndship...it wud hold no meanin'
    i wish i cud stop these tears .. i wish i cud look up a u..4 my downcast eys look so reavealin'...
    just want t tell u dat u mean the world to smbody...
    i knw dis all may sound...a lil' "too much" but its just to tell u dat ds "smbody" is gonna miss u very badly...
     
  2. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    thts beautiful!
    for a friend?
     
  3. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    ya it is...for my best frnd... :):):) ....bt he is shiftin'... :(
     
  4. best friend ...hmmmm...ladki ka best frnd is _______?
    ok so comming back to your poem

    the lines flow soo smooth ... and that is beacause this is one wave of emotions that you emptied fully ... again im not sure that this way of writinng is the best this thought culd have been presented..but i liked it


    improvements: i want more of comparision sort of stuff and keep up the truthfullness with which u write..this will go a long way
     
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnkx a lot... :)
     
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Ladki........80% of the times :p
     
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    well in dis case..i am included in d rest 20%... :p
     
  8. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Hmmm, well I had'nt expected that. Hope you good. :)
     
  9. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    lol....besties 4 life.. :) :) :)
     
  10. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    its a lovy dovy muchy shushy stuff, what is words like "tok", "dis", "dat". there is no charecter linit here so you can put full words.
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    olrite..thnks 4 ur suggestn :)
     

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