Dosto,aaj main itna kahunga, Main bas insaan ban ke rahunga!! Kabhi tufaan me jaa kar bhi dekhu, Khud hi ko main paa kar bhi dekhu, Mere saamne hain kitne kinaare, Kuchh kaante,to kuchh hain sahaare, Fir bhi dariya me behta bahunga, Main bas insaan ban ke rahunga!! Chand sitaro ki khwahish nahi hai, Khwahish ho to koi bandish nahi hai, Chahu to tare tod ke bhi laau, Par is se main kya sabit kar paau? Bhale bin taaro ki zindagi jeeunga, Main bas insaan ban ke rahunga!! Aasan raste hain kitne rahon mein, Sapne jaise ki lagte hain baahon mein, Par un rasto pe chalna nahi hai, Sachchai ko kabhi bhulna nahi hai, Mushkilo se main ladta rahuna, Main bas insaan banke rahunga!! Dosto,aaj main itna kahunga, Main bas insaan ban ke rahunga!! -Tejas
you colud have been more consie as i say compact and let the reader unroll the thoughts to get his own interpetation ....like if i say ..iwant to look ahead but not by uprooting my self....i thnk i conved my point well all in all a nice attempt with best lines.. Bhale bin taaro ki zindagi jeeunga, Main bas insaan ban ke rahunga!!
