Lost in the Unknown I'm holding onto a dream that won't come true praying to a god that won't come through returned unanswered back to me, my prayers collide against empty walls as I plead and cry for a wish so dear, onto a lonely floor my tears do fall a dream so precious slips away from me, like sand slipping through fingers clenched imprisoned by self-constructed chains of memories past, holding in embrace a desire condemned I stand as if alone in the dark, nothing but emptiness engulfing me as a lost soul with a lost cause, looking for a reason to be A forgotten wish unfolds before my eyes, not having yet entered reality A dream near and yet so far, still lost in the realm of fantasy My longing drives me to insanity…and of this desire I can't let go Every price I'm willing to pay…even as oceans of tears from my eyes do flow Will any sacrifice be enough, for a god that seems to be made of ice? Determined He is to make me suffer, even as my soul torments Placing my dream within my reach, mind games He does like to play And before giving me a fair chance to happiness grasp, He laughs as He takes it away My tears befall an uncertain fate, for a wish that remains unfulfilled Oh how my heart does yearn, for a joy that escapes my arms outstretched in longing for a desire unfulfilled, drop by drop my soul does die as my eyes shed countless tears of pain, with every second that passes by December 16 2006
I generally avoid being the first to reply to/comment/appreciate anyone's work.. but its been really long since I read this and no one's been replying so... Well when I read Lost,I figured it must be "Lost Soul" and I was a bit disappointed to know I was right.But your poem makes up for more than that.. The most praisable part of your work is the description..loved it!!! Firstly it did give me a sense of actually reading about a lost soul..the feeling of "nowhereness" (if there is such a word).It also depicts a sense of pain the character is facing.Towards the end I even pitied the character you depicted.. "My longing drives me to insanity…and of this desire I can't let go Every price I'm willing to pay…even as oceans of tears from my eyes do flow" ^^What is that after "insanity".. Briefing it up,I liked your description,I liked the fact that the language was simple and yet expressive,you've portrayed the emotions successfully,and the rhyming gives a good flow to the poem..Reps.
hey neo thanks so much for the response and the reps "My longing drives me to insanity, and of this desire I can't let go Every price I'm willing to pay, even as oceans of tears from my eyes do flow" i dunno where "…" came from lolzz
