hello! ok now this poem is really not the sort of poems i usually rite and i am shocked myself... hehe... just a lil experiment (hope it doesn;t blow up my lab ) so just read wat i have ritten and tell me wat u think of it...anyway...... here goes... hope u guys enjoy reading it... Lost love Let me try and explain How hard it is To love someone wen u r not of the age How ppl try making u forget The one u love the most The one u care for But the truth is he lives no more He has been driven out of ur life Even though u never wanted so It’s hard to explain But at least I can try How do I tell u What lies in my heart All the feelings That r tearing me apart Just give me time; To wipe my tears To face the world In this never ending fear With fear I have lost u How do I try to live But I guess I have to survive Without u that is! But do not forget me dear U were the one I loved and cherished One day we might meet again Just open ur arms and say “I still care!” thanks for reading u all and now don't forget to comment!
@ cryptic.... thanks! uuuummm.... nahhhhh.... just rote it like that! hehe @ vishwa... thanks a lot man!
a good concept.. nice try.. u can still develop it more... more rhyme.. n more sad words n emotins might help...
yaar i think the guy has sufferd a lot...kyaaa stuff likhaa hai .......abhi more sad words :shock: ............BACCHE KI JAAAN LO GE KYAAA : my advice is..... if the 1st one cheats u, 2nd one was bitch 3rd one was not so good even she ditched Dont loose hope 5th one khoj jo kuch phata hai get it all stiched..... :beer:
Cryptic .....Main bhi jasoos..hunn.. but not sure ki ladka ya girl ....u know these days people r experimenting soo much.....
gave me goosebumps..and i think my heart skipped a beat.. u have a way with words girl..the poem left me speechless... i can relate to it : **hugs**
hira i wonder..how could you write w/o going thru such times urself..is it that ur way too empathetic? heh nice poem!!!!!
FIRSTLY ...... thanks a LOT of reading all of u! @ nimisha...... thanks a lot for ur comments! always looking fwd to them! @ madhuresh ...... uuuuummmmm..... well firstly i am a GIRL! and secondly thanks for ur comments but i guess a guy would have understood them much better! : @ cryptic.. thanks for clarifying who i am ! @ bubbly... thanksssss *hugs* well..... i just rote it like that as i already said... well atleast someone can relate to it but i hope u are all gud now! @ abhi... thanks a ton man! uuummmmm... u thought it was related to whom? me or bubbly? hehe : @ vini... thanks! well.... could be! hehe... can't say anything!
nice attempt hira...even i can relate to it...but i dunno..theres sumthin missing...the feel of the whole thing is not really...what should i say.. moving,as it should have been...(again just my opinion)...nice poem overall..
@ apurbajd..... thanks for the reps! @ hardik ... opinions always welcomed by me! yea maybe cause i am not going through all this just rote it cause i felt like! hehe thanks anyway! @ ujsen.... thanks... will keep that in mind @ sanju_strings... thanks
me too....can relate to it : : way to go gurl....a very fair attempt here...:beer: that to without being thru this in life....whoa:shock:
