Lost Love!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Jan 15, 2006.

  1. #iR@


    hello! ok now this poem is really not the sort of poems i usually rite and i am shocked myself... hehe... just a lil experiment (hope it doesn;t blow up my lab ;) ) so just read wat i have ritten and tell me wat u think of it...anyway...... here goes... hope u guys enjoy reading it...

    Lost love

    Let me try and explain
    How hard it is
    To love someone
    wen u r not of the age

    How ppl try making u forget
    The one u love the most
    The one u care for
    But the truth is he lives no more

    He has been driven out of ur life
    Even though u never wanted so
    It’s hard to explain
    But at least I can try

    How do I tell u
    What lies in my heart
    All the feelings
    That r tearing me apart

    Just give me time;
    To wipe my tears
    To face the world
    In this never ending fear

    With fear I have lost u
    How do I try to live
    But I guess I have to survive
    Without u that is!

    But do not forget me dear
    U were the one I loved and cherished
    One day we might meet again
    Just open ur arms and say “I still care!”

    thanks for reading u all:) and now don't forget to comment! :cool:
    apurbajd likes this.
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    a good attempt :)

    are you actually going thru this?
  3. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    nice .. that was touching..
  4. #iR@


    @ cryptic.... thanks! :) uuuummm.... nahhhhh.... just rote it like that! hehe

    @ vishwa... thanks a lot man!
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    in that case, nicely done! :beer:
  6. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    a good concept..
    nice try..
    u can still develop it more... more rhyme.. n more sad words n emotins might help...
  7. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    yaar i think the guy has sufferd a lot...kyaaa stuff likhaa hai .......abhi more sad words :shock: ............BACCHE KI JAAAN LO GE KYAAA :p:
    my advice is.....
    if the 1st one cheats u, 2nd one was bitch
    3rd one was not so good even she ditched
    Dont loose hope 5th one khoj
    jo kuch phata hai get it all stiched..... :beer:
  8. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^hira, the one who wrote the poem, is a girl
  9. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Cryptic .....Main bhi jasoos..hunn.. :cool:

    but not sure ki ladka ya girl ....u know these days people r experimenting soo much.....
  10. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    gave me goosebumps..and i think my heart skipped a beat..
    u have a way with words girl..the poem left me speechless...
    i can relate to it :eek::
  11. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    good poem..even i thought it was related to u..............
  12. vini

    vini Repeat Offender


    i wonder..how could you write w/o going thru such times urself..is it that ur way too empathetic? heh

    nice poem!!!!! :)
  13. #iR@


    FIRSTLY ...... thanks a LOT of reading all of u!

    @ nimisha...... thanks a lot for ur comments! always looking fwd to them! :)

    @ madhuresh ...... uuuuummmmm..... well firstly i am a GIRL! and secondly thanks for ur comments but i guess a guy would have understood them much better! :p:

    @ cryptic.. thanks for clarifying who i am ! ;)

    @ bubbly... thanksssss *hugs* well..... i just rote it like that as i already said... well atleast someone can relate to it but i hope u are all gud now! :)

    @ abhi... thanks a ton man! uuummmmm... u thought it was related to whom? me or bubbly? hehe :eek::

    @ vini... thanks! :) well.... could be! hehe... ;) can't say anything! ;)
  14. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    I liked da concept...... nice try ....
  15. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    nice attempt hira...even i can relate to it...but i dunno..theres sumthin missing...the feel of the whole thing is not really...what should i say.. moving,as it should have been...(again just my opinion)...nice poem overall..:)
  16. UjSen

    UjSen *#!EVIL*!!


    Oh and by the way thats a good poem
    try tune it into a song>
  17. sanju_strings

    sanju_strings 50 Pai$e <3V/S<3 50 CeNt$

    gandi bachi acha attempt ;)
  18. #iR@


    @ apurbajd..... thanks for the reps! :)

    @ hardik ... opinions always welcomed by me! yea maybe cause i am not going through all this just rote it cause i felt like! hehe thanks anyway!

    @ ujsen.... thanks... will keep that in mind

    @ sanju_strings... thanks :)
  19. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    hai meri bachi kya kya likhne lag gai.. :p:

    good one dude...
  20. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    me too....can relate to it :eek:: :eek::
    way to go gurl....a very fair attempt here...:beer: that to without being thru this in life....whoa:shock:

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