Lost Love and Waiting

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by eightytwo, Mar 30, 2008.

  1. eightytwo

    eightytwo New Member

    OK! Here's the deal...

    I never thought, I would live my life without you.
    I never thought, I would get by a single day.
    I never thought, I would really lose you.
    I never thought, I'd ever see this day.

    Memories of you walk across my room,
    Reminding me of all those happy days.
    Tired of crying, worn of brooding,
    Here I am lying on the floor,
    Waiting to fall in love again.

    My heart's mixed up, stuck in a corner,
    Caught between yesterday and today.
    My mind's jumled up, driven up the wall,
    Caught between my dreams and reality.

    Fantasies of who's to come,
    Hopes of that dreamed one.
    Haunted by the fear of being alone,
    I tuck away to my corner,
    and dream away.

    Right on! This is something I came up with last afternoon. I was alone at home and bored out of my skull and was actually lying on the floor thinking about my ex-girlfriend when I started singing the first few lines from the top of my head. Got off the floor and gave it a more serious attempt.

    I know the lyrics might not sound very original but I like singing it in a bluesy way.

    Go on, people, trash me!
  2. amitrichardxess

    amitrichardxess New Member

    Don't know much abt lyrics... but its ur feelings... i wud likes to hear it.
    So plsssss upload if possible
  3. eightytwo

    eightytwo New Member

    What?! Dude, seriously!
  4. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    Actually..i like it. And im quite frank.

    I love the second stanza. Its even more exceptional when you are trying to get over an ex fiance :cry1: Gives a more personal touch. Like someone knows exactly what you're going through..

    Give it a shot.. upload the song if you're comfortable..
  5. eightytwo

    eightytwo New Member

    Well, I did record it on my phone while practicing it but I'm not sure if I shoul upload it... I've never been much into performing arts... but you never know, I might change my mind and decide to show off.

    Thanks for your comment, though!

    And thanks to you, too, amitri!
  6. amitrichardxess

    amitrichardxess New Member

    hey no need to thanks pal. But seriously give it a try
  7. Sastry

    Sastry New Member

    Tabs for Lost Love & Waiting

    Awesome...Sometimes lonelyness reveals your inner thoughts into poems. I liked the lyrics so much, but unfortunately I cannot create the tabs for this. Maybe in the same tunes of Titanic, can someone post the tabs or email me j_karra@yahoo.com. I want to play this for some one special....
  8. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Kk..it's mostly a good write when people say this coz this generally happens when people write for themselves(n that is in fact what makes it better)..or sometimes the poem is so good that it sounds sarcastic (the line I mean)..Anyway..it IS good!First 4 lines..meh...fine..sorta introduction.The rest is good though.See,almost every poet writes on this topic every now and then..so it's hard to put in a new emotion that everyone feels but rarely writes..
    so "Tired of crying, worn of brooding,
    Here I am lying on the floor,
    Waiting to fall in love again...kinda stood out (in a good sense)..loved the thought.The rest is well written again..but usual stuff...The end is pretty good..liked the reference to the "corner".All in all,it seems genuine.
  9. eightytwo

    eightytwo New Member

    Wow! Thanks, guys!!! Seriously!

    Well, I was thinking about my ex when I started singing this and I am still single and considering the fact that it has been three years since I met someone, I guess, I just let it pour. Never thought of posting it anywhere till I joined this place.

    Now I'm seriously considering uploading a recording.
  10. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    lets listen to it
    though the lines go smooth !
  11. eightytwo

    eightytwo New Member

    hold on for a while... I'm working on it...
  12. r@zor2

    r@zor2 New Member

    AMazing i was at awe when i read ur lyrics im just wishing that with ur permission i could use this to make a song PLEASE !!!
  13. r@zor2

    r@zor2 New Member

    OH im sry i didnt know u were working on it .! SRY!
  14. elfascinating

    elfascinating risqué

    Dude .. forget waiting to fall in love again.

    The only way to get over a gal is get under one.
  15. r@zor2

    r@zor2 New Member

    lol stupid 10 character limit
  16. tito419sep

    tito419sep New Member

    Why Do I Still Love You?

    Why do I Still Love You?
    Why do I cry
    who do I hide
    why do I still care
    why do I pretend your there

    why do I love you
    why do I think you love me to
    why do I feel pain
    why do I feel like I’m insane

    why do I want you so bad
    why do I get mad
    why do I miss you
    why do I need you

    I try to tell you how I feel
    but you don't care
    so I'm asking you these questions
    to see if you know I’m there!
    Coz I Still Love U
  17. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    I was hoping the answers to all the why's would be a little less obvious.
  18. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    ^^ LOL
    :shock: amen.
  19. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    first para is lil too repetitive, else looks good except for few word spells.

  20. tito419sep

    tito419sep New Member

    Me..........Just Alone

    Darkness is with night
    the moon with the moon light
    the roses with a thorn
    the sunlight with the dawn
    clouds with the rain
    a heart always with pain
    the leaves with tree
    the shore is with sea
    a boat with a stream
    and a sleep with a dream
    heat with summer
    a rainbow with the colour
    tears with eyes
    stars with the sky
    fragrance with the air
    love with care
    poetry with rhyme
    tide with time
    even a dog with the bone
    and me.........just alone

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