One of my early poems... Lost Faith I have lost my faith, spewing hatred outta every breath, a crusader for a cause, murdering everyone who’s not one of us. Kill the man, rape the woman, don’t spare anyone. Maybe I’ll repent later, contemplating this senseless massacre. I have lost my faith, spewing hatred outta every breath, My mind is not my own, compassion to me is so unknown. We wanted to create heaven, but we created hell instead, Houses and pyres burning, oh, what price have I paid ? There, I saw a child in the ruins, the blood on its face washed by tears. I couldn’t help but try, I knew I’d break down and cry. Mercy! Mercy! Mercy! screamed the child’s eyes. The only thing I had to do, the only thing I could do was turn back and go home.
Have you posted this before? I dunno, but it seems vaguely familiar. Anyway, nice work. But the ending was kinda a let down. Im talking bout the very last line. It conveys the meaning alright, but u could make it more poetic, cause that seems blunt. Anyway, thats just my 2 cents.
Tejas, I think I had posted it b4 in the poetic thoughts thread... Yeah the last line is a bit blunt but I felt that it pretty much reflected the mindset of the narrator. Yeah jay, its very much a metallica kinda thing, in fact more like megadeth, i think. thnx sanjay and sonali, glad that u guys liked it...
