Losing You!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by walk_alone, Feb 7, 2006.

  1. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**


    I loved you for all your worth,
    a chance to prove myself,
    waiting to be given my soul;

    I closed my eyes,
    waited for the verdict
    and so obvious was "my fall";

    I stood up and looked at you,
    with all my dreams shattered,
    you smiled back and bowed ur head;

    Victim was me,dnt u understand,
    "thanks,but no thanks",
    thats all you ever said;

    then you just turned around,
    and walked away slowly,
    that was last of you that I could ever see;

    how can I sleep ever again, my love,
    when I know whats my dream is gonna be.

    Now I have woken for years,
    luking at same path,
    counting those steps again n again;

    I wish u could come back,
    or lemme sleep for ever,
    'coz now I can't bear this pain;

    even if I die, I would die with my eyes open,
    so that you can look in my eyes;

    and see that what I couldnt show you,
    all these years,
    all those countless tears and sighs.

    (for the only one i ever loved)

    Comments please......
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  2. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    simple thoughts expressed in beautiful verses
    i pray that she come back and may you be success.

    see actually..these girls are bad.
    really bad.
    they cant understand what we have to say.
    they dont even try and never hesitate to good day
    and goodbye.
  3. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**


    Thnxs so much dude...i always love to read my first comments.

    noone is bad its just the way we see at things.

    thxs again.
  4. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    yeah i know...that was jus my ridiculous frustration which is always of highest degree...in this case...and mine is altogether a different case though.

    now whn we fail to perform in our job...people close to us think bad about her.
    there are people saying its not her fault but its yours of havin been thinkin about her in a different manner...btw...what's is this love that haunts the unloved. and what's that between two cute love birds.
    and ofcourse as i understand this is different from other obvious forms of love.
  5. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    man o man

    man u surely are bitten badly.. :O

    take care of urself.
  6. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    if u walk alone and keep looking back
    its better to trun around and retrace the track....

    this is what i wrote in one of my fuzzy poems but may be it fits here ...dont know....nice attempt man .....u knw any person who puts nick names like empty void alone singular like railway track or banks of river ....they all leave a lot of spaces when ever they write....same with u....jus an observation
  7. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Nice poem Pamposh.....worth giving reps...lemme see if i can..:)
  8. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    :annoyed: hv to sp
  9. #iR@


    very well expressed man... u seem to be in a lot of pain... thats all i can say after reading ur poems... just TC
  10. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Hey thxs

    Hey thxs Garima and thxs gandi...errrrrrr Achchi Bachchi LOL

    "dard jab had se bad jata hai to dava ho jata hai"
  11. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    I wonder

    I wonder what forum leader got to say abt this..............cryptic iam still waiting for ur comments. and offcourse if any one else is interested.
  12. sweetie

    sweetie New Member

    awesome poem my dear..well said and expressed..
    few words in reply...

    Precious times of memories
    Placed within my soul
    Days of warmth and pleasure
    These moments make me whole

    Tucked forever in my heart
    All memories remain
    For all the love we used to share
    These treasures are love's chain

    You gave to me the moon and stars
    The sky above was new
    This joy that I will always feel
    Is all because of you

    When I think of days of love
    I'll always think of you
    Tender moments I will share
    With lasting love so true........
  13. Rani

    Rani New Member

    awesome poetry

  14. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs all

    thxs sweetie and rani for ur comments................i luv 'em
  15. guitarangela

    guitarangela gran'ma

    amazing dear...just plain good...u have expressed ur feelings in words so beautifully...just so good....tell me if that person of ur dreams didn't fall for this one..she has some serious problem otherwise.... :think:
    hope u will get her as u wished... :beer: :beer: :rock: :rock: all my prayers with u.....
    reps if permit....
  16. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    nice job pamposh..
    carrying its emotions so smoothly...

    @sweetie..that was good too...
  17. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    nimisha : thanxs for ur compliment.
    angela : thxs to u too...............
  18. **Rani**

    **Rani** --DawnyGal--


    what A great lovely poem keep on
  19. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Just reviving an old thread for new readers.

    comments are welcome
  20. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    gr88888 lines/........
    wow.........tht was the tym ppl actully used to comment an' appreciate.....

    well i guess u'd b long over it now......

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