i was bit sad today so wrote this poem...its my first poem in my life ... so if any one can make corrections then pls do it ^^ Maghar.... kho gaya joh kabhi apna tha toot gaya woh sapna joh apna tha door ho kar bhi bohat pass thi woh maghar kismat ko yeh shayad manzoor na tha Jaan sey zayda jis ko chaha usi ney samjhney main bhool ki zinda tha tabh tak jabh tak woh sath thi dil ko jis ki chahat thi us ko paney ka junoon bhi tha jisam ki har sans pe usi ka nam tha maghar kismat ko yeh baat manzoor na thi abh zindagi main kuch na raha kuch paa kar kia karoon gha jabh tak yeh sansain chal rahi hain... Tumhara hi nam laboon sey loon gha... Faiq... waiting for comments :
*speechless* :shock: THIS CAN NOT BE UR FIRST POEM MR!!!!! i mean... :shock: its AMAZING! :nw: good job man... i mean mein urdu ki poems USUALLY nahi perhti cause u know kafi HI-fi words use kertay hein poets tou meray sir kay UPAR say guzar jati hai! but man this was like... SIMPLE WORDS which gave a perfect poem! impressive work man... but the main point... hope u feeling better... i know its kinda weird... but get sad more often so u can rite more of such amazing poems and post them here! : *lame joke* : anywayyyyy... hope things r better now!
That was really good....you've portrayed your feelings + pain in the most perfect way..and yeah thanx for keeping the poem simple and not getting all poet-ish... Simple words say it all. "Jaan sey zayda jis ko chaha usi ney samjhney main bhool ki" My favourite lines...looking forward to copying them in one of my future poems.:Lighten: Reps.
lol made me think its a funny poem anyways nice effort faiq.. sometimes the words get too transparent
: may be cz i am not a professional or use to writter : ... i just wrote on the notepad what my mind said to me...
Makes me feel you have attempted many times but this was your 1st successful one...nicely written moderator Had also forgotten ure name in ma siggy..edited.
no aj u'r wrong ... i haven't attempted many times...if i had then i would hv posted it on IGT for sure... ny ways thnx
this poem = story of 50% of boys.... gr8 job... i seriously liked this poem... cuz i've seen my very close friend go through exactly the same thing..