Live In My Life!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Mar 17, 2006.

  1. #iR@


    hi everyone... rote this poem today after my xam!(not during it ok!:p:) hope u guys like it... like always looking forward to ur comments... posting a poem after QUIET a long time! here goes.....

     live in my life!

    Live in the darkness
    That petrifies me
    Live in the river
    That I drowned in
    Live in the deepness
    That I am lost in
    Live in the thoughts
    That I believe in
    Live in the skies
    That r my limits
    Live in the dreams
    That r mine
    Live in the rules
    That I am forced to follow
    Live in the world
    That was once mine

    Then let me know if
    What I did; was wrong
    Was absurd
    Was inhuman

    Only then let me know
    That it wasn’t the time for me to go;
    The time to kill myself;
    And say goodbye!

    thanks for reading ppl! comments........:cool:
  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    good to have u back dear:)
    i like the poem..
    reminded me of one quote
    "Always put yourself in other’s shoes and if you feel that it hurts, it probably hurts the other person too....!"

    Nice work dear:)
  3. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ya..good one on with ur poems.....and wc back........
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    I absolutely loved it!

    I heard the silence you had heard
    I walked on the sand you had stepped upon
    I felt the lonely chill that had made you shiver
    I saw your time, had indeed come, to move on...
  5. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Damn girl, i wanna write like you :grin: Simplicity amplifies elegance, i loved it!
  6. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    :shock: u can also write good then y the poetess is resting.

    i m impressed :) ..reps..:think:

    @gandi bachi (coz i forgot ur id) - y to die for.. but nicely written.

  7. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Nice indeed.

    Gud to read u again.
  8. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ya man..u can extend thoes lines in a separate thread....:p:
  9. #iR@


    @ bubbly... thanks a lot dear! :)

    @ abhi... thx! :cool:

    @ cryptic... thanks gurl... luved wat u rote! :beer:

    @ disturbed... thanks man... u rite quiet well and i know u know it!

    @ suchoo... thanks a lot! don't know why to die just felt that way!

    @ walk_alone... thanks a lot man!
  10. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Thank you..

    Are you sure u know what reps are and how to rep someone?
    sachoo likes this.
  11. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ^^ hehe..he got impressed by mere 5 lines...send him ur poems...i think he l be repping u 24*7............
  12. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    hira... its a very good poem..
    i wont say it excellent...
    but wanna tell u one thing... i appreciate ur efforts in poetry..
    u not only look for new theme to write... but u come up wit new writting skills also... makes ur poetries stand out diffrent from others..
    good going dear...
    keep it up..
  13. #iR@


    @ nimisha.. WOW! thats a great response! :) thx gurl...
  14. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    Bhool gaya tha. it's there now greedy gurl :aggre: ..
  15. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    well expressed thoughts from you.....

    keep posting

  16. #iR@


    thanks rohit!:)
  17. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    5 words r enuf to impress me yaar, but cant read the whole lot. thnx but pls turn the sentences some how , "i think he l be repping u 24*7" :shock:
  18. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    cooool poem Hira .....Loved it !! keep writing babe....:)
  19. #iR@


    @ garima... thx :)

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