Live In My Life!

hi everyone... rote this poem today after my xam!(not during it ok! hope u guys like it... like always looking forward to ur comments... posting a poem after QUIET a long time! here goes.....

 live in my life!

Live in the darkness
That petrifies me
Live in the river
That I drowned in
Live in the deepness
That I am lost in
Live in the thoughts
That I believe in
Live in the skies
That r my limits
Live in the dreams
That r mine
Live in the rules
That I am forced to follow
Live in the world
That was once mine

Then let me know if
What I did; was wrong
Was absurd
Was inhuman

Only then let me know
That it wasn’t the time for me to go;
The time to kill myself;
And say goodbye!

thanks for reading ppl! comments........

 

good to have u back dear
i like the poem..
reminded me of one quote
"Always put yourself in other’s shoes and if you feel that it hurts, it probably hurts the other person too....!"

Nice work dear

 

ya..good one ....live on with ur poems.....and wc back........

 

I absolutely loved it!

I heard the silence you had heard
I walked on the sand you had stepped upon
I felt the lonely chill that had made you shiver
I saw your time, had indeed come, to move on...

 

Damn girl, i wanna write like you :grin: Simplicity amplifies elegance, i loved it!

 

:shock: u can also write good then y the poetess is resting.

i m impressed ..reps..:think:

@gandi bachi (coz i forgot ur id) - y to die for.. but nicely written.

sachoo

 

Nice indeed.

Gud to read u again.

 

ya man..u can extend thoes lines in a separate thread....:

 

@ bubbly... thanks a lot dear!

@ abhi... thx!

@ cryptic... thanks gurl... luved wat u rote! :beer:

@ disturbed... thanks man... u rite quiet well and i know u know it!

@ suchoo... thanks a lot! don't know why to die just felt that way!

@ walk_alone... thanks a lot man!

 

Thank you..

Are you sure u know what reps are and how to rep someone?

 

^^ hehe..he got impressed by mere 5 lines...send him ur poems...i think he l be repping u 24*7............

 

hira... its a very good poem..
i wont say it excellent...
but wanna tell u one thing... i appreciate ur efforts in poetry..
u not only look for new theme to write... but u come up wit new writting skills also... makes ur poetries stand out diffrent from others..
good going dear...
keep it up..

 

@ nimisha.. WOW! thats a great response! thx gurl...

 

Bhool gaya tha. it's there now greedy gurl :aggre: ..

 

well expressed thoughts from you.....

keep posting


rohit

 

thanks rohit!

 

5 words r enuf to impress me yaar, but cant read the whole lot. thnx but pls turn the sentences some how , "i think he l be repping u 24*7" :shock:

 

cooool poem Hira .....Loved it !! keep writing babe....

 

@ garima... thx