~Let Me~

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by apurbajd, Jun 22, 2006.

  1. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    Let me hold you tight tonight
    pull you a bit closer
    paint a tender rose on your forehead
    I know your lips are long dried

    Let me be your guide tonight
    to this fantasy ride
    a nostalgic ride on the memory horse
    and a ride back on the passionate hope cart

    Let me wipe the tears
    off those long dried eyes
    shedding pearls for so many days
    still not lost its innocent shine

    Let me be the repenting sinner
    for all the pains I caused you
    and I will try to heal those
    with my love for you
    If only you guide me through my prayers

    And we know
    that the shadow of the past still lingers on
    that sometimes we lose our way in the fantasy ride
    and we still try to count
    how many dreams you and I lost
    in those sleepless nights

    So let me be just myself
    and love you the way I do
    let us continue this fantasy ride
    In search of hope and the sun
    And all those dreams we lost in those sleepless nights.


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    Comments /suggestions plz ................
     
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  2. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    apurbajd, i shall tell you what i feel after at least 5 distinct replies. Because, here, I understand, the replies are basically based on the first few, and I don't want me to influence the future replies....(No offences meant, general human tendency). But I shall tell you for sure.
    -Sharmontime.
     
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    make a song dude
    make a song!
    put it to some music
    its good
    and its song material..
    if its a crow that u sing like..so be it!;)

    last two lines of first para give me a feeling of incompleteness..

    i liked
    And we know
    that the shadow of the past still lingers on
    that sometimes we lose our way in the fantasy ride
    and we still try to count
    how many dreams you and I lost
    in those sleepless nights
     
  4. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    OH MAN... i LOVE WAT U RITE! AWESOME!!!!! MAKE A SONG FOR SURE!!!! UFFff..... ALAAAa!!!!! i mean i am reading this at like 2 in the morn and i JUST DON"T KNOW WAT TO SAY... AWESOME!!!!!



    reps... :cool:

    & MAKE A SONG OUTTA IT! :rock:
     
  5. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    WASN:T ABLE TO REP U!!!! :annoyed: BUT AMAZING WORK MAN! i think its ur BEST till now... :beer:
     
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    That was WOW Apurba....m gonna send this to some one rite away...:) some beautiful words with beautiful feelings....reps for ya...
     
  7. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    @Sharm ... well waiting 4 ur comment...

    @Bubbs ... thanx a lot, and if u wanna hear a crow sing , well I may try if I get enuf time ;-)

    @Hira... Its always nice to go thru ur comments,:) glad that u liked it so much. and no probs with reps,its the comments which matter more ...

    @Garima ... send this to someone?:think: lemme guess ??;) Thanx for the comment and reps ...
     
  8. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    sahi hai biduu .. sab thik keh rahe hain ...but do consider the meter 5th para is out of order ..maine gaa ke try kiyaa
     
  9. Hell'n Wheels

    Hell'n Wheels New Member

    Lovely words like that would make any woman with a soft heart forgive & forget. Truly special
     

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