light blue, a thin skin of transperent ocean some heavy brown clouds at the brink the sun shining with all its might but then it had to shrink i will swim to the cave i have seen in my dreams even if the waves of air tend to sleep wake up, we'll make to the lonley i-land for the end this water is too deep those palms are watching, the fishes know names thus the ocean is too wet for a try its nothing left for the waves like u the beach is too thirsty too dry
what refine ? tadka of refine oil ...lol....anyways thanks for the praise from the leader her self !! ps: u were elected or appointed ?
the refien i feel means here ....if u use the title as waves and ur talking about the story of a wave in sea .....refrain from using the word 'wave" for air ( as in stanza 2 line 2 ) call it breeze or zephyr etc.. also ur using two adjectives for the ocean ...very deep and wet ... evnee if i go with the thought line ...they can be made more meaingful by dening as " and the ocean is too dubious to try" i can tell more but i feel this is enough...at ur level and yes ^ she ws elected then appointed ... she earned it !!
