Wrote it long time back....dint post it for some reasons...but today I felt like posting it... Lab kuchh kehna chahte the Par lafzon ka saath chhoot gaya Tumhe pyar karma chahte the Par us se pehle hi ye dil toot gaya Bas aansoo hi nahi chhalke is aankh se Varna ab to ye dil tukdo me reh gaya Jo na kabhi socha tha sapne me Use bhi ye dil hakikat me chup-chap seh gaya Koshish to kii…ki kabhi is dil me bhi bahaar aaye Par ye dil banjar registaan hi bana reh gaya Hasna chahta tha ye dil tumhare saath Par wo lamha zindgi me aane se pehle hi hamse chin gaya
nice one Garima .. great and touching start Code: Lab kuchh kehna chahte the Par lafzon ka saath chhoot gaya one question.... where do you people get all this mind to write such stuff... i mean if we see it.. those are simple daily used words... but convey a lot
^^^ I always open ur poetry threads wid a handkerchief in hand .... : bt dis one didnt make me cry ........ as usually.... good one though ...... ;-)
it's so awesome that u write beautifully in english as well as hindi unlike ppl like me :'( this one's also beautiful!
i have read a poem of yours very similar to this one .. feel as if this one is the continuation of that previous ones .... nicely done ... i will agree with rizaaj ..its a wonder how you guys can put your emotions into words this easily ... lemme see if i can rep you garry ..
Garima, Garima, really heart touching! Dil se paar ho jathi hai tumare sayari, sayad mohabbat ki alam se gujri ho, isliye chalkthi hai dil ki kusbu tumare alfaaz mein. Mera dil kehtha hai, ki mohabbat mein na gaam hota hai na kushi, jo bhi hota hai vaha kudha hota hai. Gaam huhi, dil tadpa, aansoon ****i, bas bahut roliya. Kudha ke diye huhe gaam ko pardha kar, uske diye huhe kushi ki pal jalkahu, bas hasta huha, hastha huha, mein chala jahu.
@Rizaaj...thanks buddy...i wish i cud answer that question..: well, will try to find the answer :grin: @Apurba...gud to kno that u dint cry this time : ...thanks @Trish...Thanks yaar :grin: @Shak my buddy...its axactly the same(except the last line) that I PMd u that day...itz so gud to kno that u remember evn aftr so many days.. @Srinivas....sahi farmaya aapne. thanks @Atom_bomb...errr:...well, thanx for that..but....well...m outta words actually: @Abhi....thanks :grin: & gud that u hv changed ur avy..it rocks:rock:
again im late to ctach ur poem... but its worth of time... gr8 job garimaa.. this time ur rhyming is so good... :beer:
Daad kaboul kijiyega...Garima ! Aap ne bahout acha likha hai ! Dil main outar gaye har lafz...! Take care Amanush...
@Nimisha...its better to b late than never thanks ALOT....always luking frwd for ur comments @Amanush :nw: :nw: thanks ALOT yaar
damn! u make me think! and you know how hard is That for people like me :shock: your poems are like the strong wind's they make you move and grasp for support.. kuch samjhi? you write well girl!!
Garima.. u got good potential .. i want you to write "dark lyrics/poems" .. can't rep u otherwise would have repped ya.. but .. please try to write "dark" stuffs... cause poem forum is full of such poems ...
Well am kinda new round ere...so catchin up with ur poems kinda late but hats off....it got tears in ma eyes...n what uv written is jus like what im feelin rite now! Keep it up!....its fab
oooops....nice to see a reply...aftr so many days Thanks Fats Hira thanx to u too.... U two Gemies too huh....Gemies :rock:
