Killing me again............

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by apurbajd, Dec 13, 2005.

  1. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    Well! pls comment how is it. My first poem got quite a few repiles here and I got some nice tips also to improve my writing ....dont know If I have been able to understand all... But I can guess where I stand now from your comments abt this one ... so pls post ...

    Killing me again….

    Haven’t I told you dear?
    let me live with these tears
    let me be in this black
    let me enjoy the time I spend
    killing me slowly and fast

    Haven’t I begged you dear?
    don’t come so closer
    don’t hold me with your caring arms
    don’t wipe my tears away and make me weaker

    Haven’t I always been?
    a man so stubborn and mean
    did I care for anyone who loved me?
    and love anyone who cared for me?
    Now that life has moved on
    I find myself so lost!

    Now that I can’t cry anymore
    Can’t sleep in the dark
    Now all those days seems so lost
    When I used to kill myself slowly and fast
    So many times……
    CrYpTiC_angel likes this.
  2. peaceful_words

    peaceful_words New Member

    this is really good....that touched me....good job dude
  3. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    last para :rock:ed........good try :beer:
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    loved it, gr8 work!

    i knew you could do better than ur 1st poem... keep writing!

    repped ya :)
  5. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    Thanx people.................. now I cant stop writing I guess. ;) ;)
  6. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    Wondering if only 3 people liked this poem!!!!! :annoyed: :eek::
    akkyy21 likes this.
  7. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    Not my kinda stuff,....
    Its very dangerous with feelings n all kinds.....

    But cool,.. reps comin up for ya!!

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