Just u & me....

Hey guys....
just lemme kno if its worth reading....mah first romantic poem....no sad feelings here:grin:

First ray of sun falling on my head
I see you staring at me
Still lying in the bed

I see the same desire in your eyes
You are just clad between those sheets
And want me to sit beside

That sparkle in your eyes, melt something in me
The way I enjoyed last night
Now it seems you are asking for the fee

Now its my turn to make you feel special
You & me alone
In this beautiful castle

We looking into each others eyes
You want me, I want You
There's nothing else for which we would compromise

Now the game starts
That touch of yours
Just tear me apart

I want more & more of you
And these flying days make me believe
That this feeling is so very true

go guyz...........

 

i like it of course firstly cuz its not that sad .. and secondly its mature romanticism .. nice .. and yeah .. the could have been a bit better ..

 

this is good..........made it special because it varies from ur style......good going, garima.........
reps for u to encourage u more.......

 

nice work garima...i agree with what angela said...its sumthing different from yu......and its sweet...the line "now it seems yu are asking for the fee" somewhat through me off in bad thoughts...but thats cuz im not thinking straight...not yur poem's fault...

 

@Shak, Angela, Divy....thanx guys.
Angela...thanx sweety I need that encouragement. :grin:

 

Good u tried sumthing which I could read without shedding any tears...

Nice one!

 

:RollLol: thanx dude....i dint kno that i tortured u guys so much : anyways...atleast some1 was ther to share the concern...thanx again :grin:

 

Garru plz don't mind I always give frank opinions.. that para made me think that u hired a Male Prostitute.. and now he is asking for the fee.. for last night..


Rest the poem is superb.. i liked it because.. it does't have any sad moments..

Reps to u.. :beer:

 

^^lolz...btw, very nice 1 there @ garima...

 

wow garry.. good effort gurl!!

**wants to write a romantic poem too**

:cry1:

 

Vish...that means i njoyed cos of him last nite...& the fee here is the demand that hez making ...so that now he can feel the feeling of 'that' special person in my life.

& yea...i cudnt find a better word to rhym: :

 

@harls, trish....thank u folks..

 

ah!..like shahrukh said..."mature romanticism"...one of a kind poem here...great work Garima...keep goin...

 

Hey thanx....hardik. good to kno that some of u now thnk that i hv matured, only in this poem though :grin:

 

a welcome change from your dil-ke-arma-aasuon-mein-beh-gaye poems!!
:grin:

 

Good work....(cant give reps!! )

 

:grin: thanks Shsnawada....btw, is it ur real name? if yes, wat does it mean?

 

just read ur stream of words.and hey does it flow.nice goin

 

^^^Thanks :grin:

 

This one is good .. atleast better then what u posted the other day.. !! ..