Jeete Hain Hum - Written & Composed by Me

Couple nights ago I came up with kind of a sad tune and then sat down later and put down some words to go along. I invite people to take a dig at this Hindi song I wrote and composed couple days ago for someone.

Song: https://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=537688&songID=5859501

Lyrics: https://gdhar.com/2007/10/09/jeete-hain-hum/

Let’s see if anyone has any comments on the song. I am always looking for people’s comments on my compositions.
Thank you.

 

congrats on your own composition! well done

you should try setting your own vocal quality and move away from the typical