Jai hind

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Angira, Dec 17, 2008.

  1. Angira

    Angira New Member

    I know i m not a very good poet but though whenever sum interesting lines strike my mind i jot down on paper and create one of MY POEMS which r often based on the lives around us...
    Mumbai terror attack has shaken me frm tip to toe n i very heartily wrote a poem...i felt like sharing with u all

    Main Maa,
    Apne bachchon ko meri khaatir
    chhoti chhoti aankhon mein
    bade bade sapno ko pirote dekha hai
    Jaan ki bagair parwaah kiye
    Shaan ke arth ko inhone
    bas kurbaani se jodna sikha hai
    Jab bhi main dukhon mein jhulas jaati
    apne bachchon ko sabse kinare kar aati
    Sambhal kar.....Sambhal kar
    Main Maa,
    apni mamta ko haarne na deti
    Zindagi aur maut ke beech ki
    is jung mein
    apne chaaron taraf maine
    apno ko jalte dekha
    apne aachal se
    apne bachchon ki shavon ko
    lipte dekha, jinhone meri khaatir
    apne khun ko mere charno mein
    nyochhawar kar dala
    Main Maa,
    apne khun par garv karti hun
    meri mamta to
    aasu bayaan kar jaate
    parantu main tumhe
    isse kamzor nahi banana chahti
    bas isiliye akele mein main
    aahen bhar liya karti hoon
    dard ke ghoont pi kar
    khaamosh rah liya karti hoon
    Main Maa

    Guys, I wanted a suggestion frm u all tht many more good lines r coming to my mind so should i ammend this poem or let it be so?
  2. Sastry

    Sastry New Member

    Let it flow....Don't STOP
  3. Angira

    Angira New Member

    Thanks Sastry for ur comments
  4. Angira

    Angira New Member

    it seems tht no one else is passionate bout the nation
  5. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    It's a sensitive issue to write on and I avoid commenting on poems like these.

    I think you should write on.
  6. maxeffect

    maxeffect New Member

    good subject... good lines.. good usage...
  7. anum324

    anum324 New Member

    Hey...returned to IGT after long....read ur peice it amazing and very sublte n smooth for the patriotic emotions.I really liked it.

    There is no end to such emotions.

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