Its better in Hell....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Hardik, Dec 22, 2005.

  1. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    Hi guys...was doin some maths today,and was so bored,i wrote this...thats why its long... :p:

    Its better in Hell....

    Hell doors open
    Calling me in
    Glad i was
    But asked a min.

    Hear my plea
    Have something to tell
    Be patient
    Dont ring the bell

    From the day
    When i was born
    Everyone kicks
    Everyone scrons

    Devils all
    No clone
    Millions them
    Me alone

    Mornings static
    Nights dead
    Get up,survive
    Go to bed

    Was a zombie
    Body,no soul
    Aimless arrow
    Velocity,no goal

    Crying heart
    Bleeding eyes
    Truth - NO
    Only lies

    Blades in hands
    Blood on floor
    Neck in rope
    Thoughts no more

    Then she came
    Dint like it
    She stopped me
    Dint fight it

    Held my hand
    Wiped a tear
    Called me "dear"

    Fought for me
    Drew them away
    Love,she'd say

    Alien feeling
    But was great
    Something for me
    Besides hate

    She taught
    I learnt
    Love grew
    Hate burnt

    She's my world
    Used to think
    Loved her
    Breath and blink

    But one day
    I opened the door
    She said
    "i love you no more"...........**

    So hear my plea
    Have something to tell
    I think
    Its better in Hell.

    **now i was bored of the just ended :p: (would continue after another maths session;) )

    Thank you for goin thru this :nw:
    shsnawada and the_wizard like this.
  2. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ok ppl.....i would like some replies here.....or you too lazy to read it all...:p:
  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    all i can say is... ur poem is like ur avtaar...
    sho shweet....

    i wonder if ur maths session wud have continued.. n we cud see happy ending....
  4. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^thanks, but as you can see from the poem's title...there cannot be an happy ending to this poem....:eek::
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    i think it is indeed a happy ending... coz u r saying its better in hell...
    so someway or other u r feeling better..
    thats a better

    next time try starting wit heaven....
  6. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    very optimistic you are nimisha....thank you for reviving my spirits...:):)
  7. uj_6string

    uj_6string Nickelodean Addict :D

    nice poem man.....quite impactful.....i liked it a lot...:)
  8. #iR@


    VERY nice poem...... really liked it..... the best part is its not like SENTENCES, just some SHORT words which contain meaning widin themselves.... VERY NICELY DONE........ GOOD WORK MAN! keep it up! :)
  9. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.


    @hira...nice to see ur reply...thanks a lot...atleast you got the main attraction of the poem...thank you very much...:):)
  10. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    Well Dude...
    I love the whole damn thing! and I cant be more blunt then that. LOL. Its so to the point and frank...its amazing. And what really tickled me was the fact that you added that little twist at the end...

    "So hear my plea
    Have something to tell
    I think
    Its better in Hell"

    Pretty darn good!
  11. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^the best reply so far....thanks a lot Petunia...:)
    and since you liked the twist at the end(which wasnt my intention when i wrote it),I will leave it as it is...
  12. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    AWESOME!! i took a sort of break and when i'm back, what do i see?? an amazing poem! loved it :)

    ha.. u dont need lessons from me man, u already got it in ya!

    P.S. cant give reps :(
  13. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^ah! finally....was waiting for your reply from so long......where had you been?..
    you think its Awesome? a lot cryptic... :dance: :rule:
    you see,it was your poems that inspired me to write,and now this boosts my i am going to try and write one more... :beer:
    and dont worry about the reps....its your reply that matters....Thank you!!
  14. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^keep writing!!

    waiting eagerly for ur next poem :)
  15. shsnawada

    shsnawada Cyborgs & Pasta

    Nice work man....reps to you.
  16. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.


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