"It" it teaches you to cry, it teaches you to smile; it teaches you to feel, it teaches you to heal. you learn all life long, only to depart; with nothing, not even your memories on. freed from your misery, away from you grief; u see yourself, smiling cunningly, mocking at "it". it was "it", who was "the reason"; of all your pain and distress, and now you leave "it", defeated and disappointed. you close your eyes, and fly away; with an angel of death, leading your way. yes it was you "life", I dreamt abt you last night. another unedited peom from me. Do post your valuable comments and suggestions.
very good! one suggestion though replace the second person "You" with "one" except for the last two lines.
Awesome is the word,,,,here ppl write bout death....good that u wrote bout 'Life'....reps if possible.
Yes Garima.....smtimes we get too busy with our troubles that we lose track of our lives................thxs for reading.
"it" matter's come what may..it does i like the theme nice flow and jus the right length.. what i perceive coincidently "life" or "it" can be replaced with a person aswell in the poem instead of "you" it can also be "i"..and still make sense! it's good..
I wish u hadnt put the word 'it' in quotes. Made me wanna take off my slipper and squash smthng to death coz it sounded like ur referring to an insect. Nice poem though!
I really enjoyed your poem. I got a silly question for you though, and I'm being sincere so, please don't think I 'm trying to be a smart a** but , How come an atheist writes of "the angel of death"? Every body keeps telling me I write to "personally" in my stuff..... Dude you must be the KING of stepping out of yourself! LOL Kudos 2 U man! Hell'n