oh yeah..here i am incoherant with rage and grief well to admit...i am kind of glad that this encounter was brief damn..when i think about all u said..all you did why din i realize that for you..i was just another kid just thinking about what went wrong just thinking why did it took so ..oh so long everything was so damn perfect was it she...or was it you..or was it me..that proved to be a defect..? make it..move it...break it.. oh you..how did you fake it..? what made me think that you were amazing why was i so blind ..dude you dunno how much about you i was raving.. i loved you with all that i had but dunno what made you do it...tell me.. was i so bad..? some abuse you...some console me..some tell me you were just another playboy some say you used me just as some toy you know what..i refuse to believe them all i was a stone ..dunno how you penetrated through that wall... oh forget it ..its all so over lemme now go and run for some cover.. i screamed ..i shouted ..i cried..i stammered dude you left me all shattered you cant be loving two freaking people don't play with heart and its damn emotions ..boy they are so feeble.. dunno what makes you behave as some magnet..agreed it was my folly i was attached and attracted how stupid i was ..i felt as much as me..you were committed.. dunno if i wanna blame me or i wanna blame u dunno why d hell am i even caring to remember...we're through shit...!! i loved you..and will do so forever no matter for you i was just a bloody chewing gum..chewed in and spit out..oh yeah.. damn me .. i still have hope i wanna get you out of my mind....get me some dope.. shit..!! u did say u were never away.. maybe even now you would say that you'd never be apart i just wanna stare you in those cold eyes and shout out..don't you dare to f*** with a true heart...
its nice...specially the use of hurt and rage, intertwined. Makes me lose faith in love even further. I've learnt not to believe in a bi-directional love. There's nothing like that, never can be... Like these lines...keep posting...
Nice..although, next time with the rhymes, try to focus it in a flow. The poem doesnt flow with rhyme AND irregular sentences. Try to build a rhythm in mind.. But anyway.. nice work.