The best thng abt this place(site ) is dampness ..i love the taste !! read this So,put it simply in jeans with chappls.. nothing needs make up, bellay of bangles.. i can hear the night, touch the sound of the drops.. kiss the wispers of sunlight... slolitude i owe you a lot dillusion you were useless i thought sounds i sought.. sounds i got.. look how lovely gifts you brought belive me with most near ones around with all happy and me barefoot on ground want to leave the town.. will swim and will droun.. waving the mask of a cloun.. all's will be fun, so no one will turn around.. the good-bye cards are not cheap... 100 buks in staples... So i put it simply in jeans with chappals ..... solitude i owe u a lot...!!
The first verse was awesome. You paint some very pretty pictures with your words. You've spoilt the rest of it by trying too hard to rhyme it...it comes out a little forced I though. I think you should rework this. It's too pretty to be left like this.
thanks bjr andacoustic... this ws actually in hindi .... i felt shy putting it up like the way it was...so translated it ....and like all other words it just became some words
nope hindi is like very pure .. transparent kind of language ... it becomes difficult to hide who u are...i love english <hide> well thanks for reading and commenting !
