I'll Be Waiting

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by CrYpTiC_angel, Oct 12, 2005.

  1. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    I wrote this poem today...
    if u wanna give feedback on it, let it be abt d poem (n not abt how i'm feelin n who i'm waiting for n all...)

    I'll Be Waiting

    A little crazy I may be
    But I'm different from what you see
    A little butterfly is what you lack
    You're looking for it but just turn back
    It's in my hands and it wants to fly
    It'll set you free and you'll never have to cry
    Alll you have to do is come to me
    I'll be waiting with my heart on my sleeve

    A little kiddish I may be
    But I'm more grown up that I may seem
    Don't dismiss me as a ray of sunshine
    There's a whole lotta darkness in my mind
    You're not doing me a favour by going away
    There is just so much left to say
    All you have to do is come to me
    I'll be waiting with my heart on my sleeve

    A little disturbed you may be
    But trust me, it doesn't bother me
    With yourself you're fighting this war
    Did you ever ask yourself "What for?"
    A little solace I had brought
    I need you too, you're all that I've got
    All you have to do is come to me
    I'll be waiting with my heart on my sleeve
    jekyll likes this.
  2. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    very well written!!!!!
    gr8 job....
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    its wonderful girl..
  4. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    talking about poems..u surely have ur heart up ur sleeve.. :) nice one
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    @ansh, martina, vini



    remember i told u i'm off writing poems for a while... i wrote this soon after :grin:
    i always end up doin wat i dont plan to.. hehe
  6. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    and thats the beauty.. u can never write a poem if u plan and then settle down to write it..never wid me atleast!!!

  7. jekyll

    jekyll Banned

    Cryptu ...

    now i am in love with you :insane:
  8. the_wizard

    the_wizard Omega == God

    nice one....loved it....
  9. krish_4

    krish_4 New Member

    oh tht poem was really awesome.....nice........
  10. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    @the_wizard, krish

    thnx :)


    yeah, i love me too :grin:
  11. jekyll

    jekyll Banned

    i expeceted a slightly different sentence construction ... (clue: u used wrong pronoun)
  12. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^^ that was intentional :grin:
  13. jekyll

    jekyll Banned

    ofcourse i know ...

    even these ---> :annoyed: n :mad: were intentional

    or rather to put it more bluntly : they were manipulative actions :grin: :p: just like your intentional onces ;)
  14. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^^hehe... ;)
  15. gud1 ;) keep it up
  16. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!


    thnx dude..
  17. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    needless to say....that i love wat u write.......................
  18. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    wow...trsh.......that waj zuperb!
  19. hate_eternal

    hate_eternal Banned

    Fabulous stuff.
  20. Rude_gal:)

    Rude_gal:) New Member

    nicely written....but was confusing for me..dunno y :eek::

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