-Ikraar- The Confession Kehte hai kal shaam kuch alag hogi Kal tanhai saath na hogi Kal se hum door chalte chalte Kal ke paas aa gaye Na samajh paye hum Kab zindagi bita di humne kal-aaj uar kal main Na samajh paye hum Kab ruksat kar diya dil ko ik khwabon ke mele main Lafzon ke jaal main Hum khud ko bunte chale gaye. Ik dhaaga toota Hum phir use jodte chale gaye Tumse door tumhare paas Ik alag zindagi jeete hai Humse door phirbhi humare paas Aapka ik alag ehsaas chate hai Na kahege hum Pyar na-kaam raha humara Na kahege hum Pyar adhoora raha humara Labon se na kahege Nazaren bhi chura lege Lekin darte hai hum Kahi ye dil hi na daga de-de Soch rahe the hum Nagmon ke bahane hum apne pyar ko yaad kar le. Katra-e-khoon samete hum phir fariyaad kar le. Lekin lamhon main zindagi guzar gayi Moti ki tarah woh bhi bikhar gayi aahe bharte jab hum ek pal aankhen muund bhi lete hai Saath tumhara paakar ik zindagi aur jee lete hai. ---,-'-<@ When you read.. like it or hate it Jus be honest and Comment! that also includes suggestions and corrections... Thanks! Edit:missed out a word
hmm... I feel like it is not complete yet... did you just cut it off ( I mean the last lines?) but good effort
Hey dude...now that you say that i'm doubtful too: reading it over and over again i dont think i could have thought of a better ending but anywys i dont think i'd write something to add up to that.. jus in case i do...i'l include it aswell... Thanks for reading it and thanks a lot for your comments!.. i like when people read and give me their views too...
Its beautiful... Only that somethings amiss between the second last and last para. : Maybe i m wrong.. but as a reader i felt that. But apart from that its amazing !!... very well written !! I havent read many of your poems.. but i liked this one...and would like to ask u a question which i m always posed with. Are the poems written by you.. a reflection of your life? your feelings? or your past or present scenario? Just curious :
^^ I thought its always good to be curious : I ve been taught that you should never curb your curiosity... even if starts to bug others
Lafzon ke jaal main Hum khud ko bunte chale gaye. Ik dhaaga toota Hum phir use jodte chale gaye nice one
Well Varshu-..I'm an emotional weirdo..: about my poems "Untimely Life" was gonna be my last poem.. but this was something i wrote after that..so had to post it "Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, events, is entirely coincidental" aur Zindagi Ittefaq hai soon there'l be an end to all this.. anwys...i shouldnt be making my thread boring: like the others said i do agree the last two para's are a bit abrupt.. but i am not sure if i could write anythin on the same lines maybe i'd make it up by improving in my other poems Thanks dear
nice poem but somehow i feel every para has something missing but lemme tell u even it has its own charm.
oye bubbly, i stopped so tht u could think y i stopped....: : but leave the thought coz i liked ur poem....:beer:
