i wanna go

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Nov 24, 2005.

  1. #iR@


    hello everyone..... and i am bak wid another poem after a long time i guess... just rote this one last nite...... all i need u ppl to do is read this and post and honest opinion..... that's all i want! :) not that hard is it....... :think: hehe here goes.......

     I WANNA GO!

    Could u let me go
    Could u let me live on my own
    Don’t hold me back
    I wanna go

    I canb’t take this anymore
    U r taking over my mind
    I have no hold on myself
    I wanna break free

    My feelings stream down my heart
    Somewhere deep down inside
    Where they will live forever
    Let me break free

    It’s not easy being me
    I tremble…
    I struggle…
    I fight… but still
    I loose

    Let me go this time
    I don’t wanna loose
    Don’t hold me back

    don't forget to comment and THANKS FOR READING! ;)
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    love the emotional factor of this poem, but have seen better frm u in terms of writing style.

    still, i like it! :)

    even i havent written anythng for a while... :think: it worries me :(

    P.S. hon it should be lose not loose
  3. #iR@


    ^ thanks crypitic..... i suck at spellings :eek:: srry...
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^LOL.. no need to apologize, jst keep that 1 in mind :)
  5. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    wer do ya really wanna go??... :p: good one....... :beer:
  6. guns_n_gore

    guns_n_gore hell raiser

    good one this
  7. #iR@


    @ abhi and guns THANKS! :)
  8. shak

    shak Harrr!

    could be made into a song i think ... it seems to have a tht touch to it .. quite nice
  9. jayho

    jayho New Member

    interesting. thoroughly interesting.

    i have made a song using this peom... hope you dont mind.

    hehe.. dont worry. if i sing this song ever anywhere... i will quote the lyrics to be by u. :)

    i am new here... stumbled upon your poem by chance.

    have to yet figure a good signature... till then u can call me...

  10. notty_lad

    notty_lad sudo undress

    wen i read da first stanza .. i thought as if ur tellin ur bf to let go .. more like a conversation :p: .. hehehehe .. anyway .. good effort .. try harder (honest opinion)
  11. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    nice work Hira,,,,,somethng emotional that i can relate to,,,,,
  12. #iR@


    @ sharukh... THANKS MAN!

    @ jay.... AS LONG AS U TELL IT"S BY ME i am ok wid it...hehe ... do a recording and let me know i would like to lissen wat u did wid it! ;) thanks man!

    @ notty .... THANKS FOR THE HONEST OPINION MAN! i appreciate it... honesty is wat i look for

    @ Garima..... THANKS AGAIN! always pleased wen u give a feed back! :)

    THANKS EVERYONE! really appreciate it! :)
  13. #iR@


    \/\/ELC0/\/\E to IGT JAY.... hope u ENJOY URSELF HERE MAN! :)

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