i shall be............

hey guys let me know what u ppl think of this small poem.............

i shall be
a tear born in your eyes,
to live on your cheeks ,
and to die on your lips.

i shall be an ocean,
come swim in to my arms,
and drown in my love.

i shall be a wind,
to carry u along
to a path never tread
a lane deep down in my heart

 

Amazing stuff dude Loved reading that If it's not copyrighted, can i save it?

 

thank u pal..........
u can sre save it..........

 

nice peom... but how about if u change it a lil bit

the part which includes Ocean.. can include also words like beach.. ship..

i will write in another way..

 

nice try deepak ....

 

Nice poem. Keep up the good work.

 

nice poem deepak... really loved reading it.. keep up the gud work

 

nice poem dude, it seems like u r a true poet....keep em coming...love reading ur stuff...

 

Thank u friends,i am overwhlemed by your responses

 

Good work, Deepak. Keep going......

 

nice one deepak... i shall be ur fan... :beer:
u r a real poet....

 

@ slamdunk, I'm already a fan.