I live on

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Varshita, Feb 27, 2006.

  1. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    After yesterdays blunder of compelling myself to write ... here is what i actually wanted to write. Where i let my true feelings flow without any inhibitions.
    I consider it to be my second best. Let me know what do you guys feel :)

    You entered my life
    I wasn’t sure if you would find a place for yourself
    But you did
    Never noticed how and when did it all happen
    And one night changed it all

    When the clouds of darkness embraced the world
    Our lives were taking a different route
    Words screaming to come out
    But didn’t find a medium
    And then love triumphed
    Or was it lust

    Questions still troubling me
    We wished the night never happened
    Wish we had controlled
    As the future was bleak
    Commitment lacking
    But yet it came again
    Crossing more boundaries
    We treaded more paths
    Leaving a trail of emotions behind
    For us to follow

    Then came a storm
    Gave us the real blow
    Past facing the future
    Leaving me in a dilemma
    For the decision lied in me
    Past that I loved and future that I love
    Love both ways
    This time you had questions in your mind

    The aftermath was unfortunate
    We lost love lost faith
    Above all lost the comfort
    That our souls shared
    We didn’t need to speak words
    To convey what we felt
    Today we were standing on a shore
    Where two hearts didn’t beat to be heard

    Here we stand with love in our hearts
    Silence amid and anger within
    But it’s the past that we fear
    Which holds the key to our future
    For the trust is no more
    Here in the world without you
    I live on
    Garima, the_wizard and zoomingrocket like this.
  2. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Brilliant, absolutely wonderful attempt. (being your proofreader has it's privileges i was the first one to read it) :grin:
  3. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    You must spread some Reputation around before giving it to Knight_ki_gf again. :mad: I hate this rule...
  4. b-gin

    b-gin New Member

    Good write. It is never fortunate to end a relationship, but without certain mishaps we would never get to other remarkable points in our lives !
    (like writing good poetry *nudge nudge*) Nice one.
  5. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    :grin: Ahem...........
  6. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @disturbed... Thank you so much. You are just being kind.
    Well having you as my proof reader is of much more advantage to me than to u. :)

    @b-gin...Very true. The outcome of a bad experience if always good!! Thanks :)
  7. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Always a pleasure madame, write what comes to you, always.
  8. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    sounds like u r repenting something.....y do we forget that when we do smthng we are always in control of the situation...but later on we regret....i think we shdnt.....life gives us oppurtunity to make our own destiny and we always try to be our best.

    Varshita its time for u to move on.

    By the way poem was gud...written in gloomy mood.cheer up miss.
  9. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    good one!!!
    u shd write on....
  10. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @ walk alone.... I wasnt in a gloomy mood. Its just that i wanted to write this. Its nothing about moving on or regretting anything. You cant judge my state of mind by the feel of my poems. Thanks for your views :eek::

    @ ansh... My My..:)
    you.. and telling me to write on... wow !! Now dats a compliment !!
  11. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    ^^cause that was really well written
    and isse padhte hi mere andar ghanti baj gayi...
  12. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    Thank you yaar.. aap to senti ho gaye....
    Kaun si ghanti baji hai... mujhe bhi batao ?? :eek::
  13. slash_i_m

    slash_i_m Laid to Rest

    greaT.very niceeeeeeeeeee:) :) :)
  14. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    do i need to say anything on this moree...??? i think so i have said it yesterday only D....this ones ur best of the lot.........
  15. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @slash..Thank you so much for reading :)
  16. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @ abhi.. Thanks lil brother. But i still feel my best was "Ehsaas .. un lamho ka". Maybe in english.. this has been the best so far :)
  17. slash_i_m

    slash_i_m Laid to Rest

    mera naam nahi pata? :mad:
  18. zoomingrocket

    zoomingrocket TeChNiCaL AdMiNiStRaToR

    Beautiful one.. Nice, Simple flow of thoughts...
    Really very well written...

    I liked following lines...
    Keep writing dear..

  19. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @ slash... SOMESH... i know your name. Just wasnt sure if i could use it here :eek::

    @ zoom.... Hey i m glad you finally posted in my poem. Thank you so much for taking time out for reading it :)
  20. slash_i_m

    slash_i_m Laid to Rest

    I hav no probs in ppl knowin my name.I wud hav my name in my user id but incidentally there was another member,born on the same day and the worst part Female:mad:

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