After yesterdays blunder of compelling myself to write ... here is what i actually wanted to write. Where i let my true feelings flow without any inhibitions. I consider it to be my second best. Let me know what do you guys feel You entered my life I wasn’t sure if you would find a place for yourself But you did Never noticed how and when did it all happen And one night changed it all When the clouds of darkness embraced the world Our lives were taking a different route Words screaming to come out But didn’t find a medium And then love triumphed Or was it lust Questions still troubling me We wished the night never happened Wish we had controlled As the future was bleak Commitment lacking But yet it came again Crossing more boundaries We treaded more paths Leaving a trail of emotions behind For us to follow Then came a storm Gave us the real blow Past facing the future Leaving me in a dilemma For the decision lied in me Past that I loved and future that I love Love both ways This time you had questions in your mind The aftermath was unfortunate We lost love lost faith Above all lost the comfort That our souls shared We didn’t need to speak words To convey what we felt Today we were standing on a shore Where two hearts didn’t beat to be heard Here we stand with love in our hearts Silence amid and anger within But it’s the past that we fear Which holds the key to our future For the trust is no more Here in the world without you I live on
Brilliant, absolutely wonderful attempt. (being your proofreader has it's privileges i was the first one to read it) :grin:
Good write. It is never fortunate to end a relationship, but without certain mishaps we would never get to other remarkable points in our lives ! (like writing good poetry *nudge nudge*) Nice one.
@disturbed... Thank you so much. You are just being kind. Well having you as my proof reader is of much more advantage to me than to u. @b-gin...Very true. The outcome of a bad experience if always good!! Thanks
sounds like u r repenting something.....y do we forget that when we do smthng we are always in control of the situation...but later on we regret....i think we shdnt.....life gives us oppurtunity to make our own destiny and we always try to be our best. Varshita its time for u to move on. By the way poem was gud...written in gloomy mood.cheer up miss.
@ walk alone.... I wasnt in a gloomy mood. Its just that i wanted to write this. Its nothing about moving on or regretting anything. You cant judge my state of mind by the feel of my poems. Thanks for your views : @ ansh... My My.. you.. and telling me to write on... wow !! Now dats a compliment !!
do i need to say anything on this moree...??? i think so i have said it yesterday only D....this ones ur best of the lot.........
@ abhi.. Thanks lil brother. But i still feel my best was "Ehsaas .. un lamho ka". Maybe in english.. this has been the best so far
Beautiful one.. Nice, Simple flow of thoughts... Really very well written... I liked following lines... Keep writing dear.. REgards, Zooom..!!
@ slash... SOMESH... i know your name. Just wasnt sure if i could use it here : @ zoom.... Hey i m glad you finally posted in my poem. Thank you so much for taking time out for reading it
I hav no probs in ppl knowin my name.I wud hav my name in my user id but incidentally there was another member,born on the same day and the worst part Female
